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2019-03-27 17:39

This review is part of a review swap: But regardless because of how good this story is, I'm keeping it in my library 😊 (Review valid for chapter 15) Writing Quality: I was actually surprised. There's seldom any good original novels with good writing quality around. If you're after a story with good grammar, this story is the one for you. Only minor mistakes in some areas as far as I can see. Story Development: In terms of development, I'm liking how things are going so far. Looking forward to how all the mysteries are unveiled, and see if there's any connection with appearing in each world. Character Design: Very impressive. Though there's a lot of characters and the Japanese use of surnames unless they are close may puzzle people. But the characters are developed very well, only on chapter 15~ However I can see the author is going to focus and develop the main cast very well. World Background: The setting seems very realistic, and it's easy to mistaken this as an actual book than a novel. The first few chapters may be confusing, so I do suggest to go back and read them once you've read at least 5-10 chapters. Overall: It's not your average story, and I like how unique it is from all the stories on WN. Definitely a hidden gem. I'm looking forward to reading more.

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This is a self-assesment, and it's based on the assumption that you, as a reader, aren't used to slice-of-life romance stories. I'm uploading an existing back-log, and the first 150K words or so are line-edited twice. If defining 'Writing Quality' as my mastery of the English language I dare assigning five stars here. Well, there was this back-log. As long as I'm happy with a daily update I can keep this story going for another year without writing a single word more. Make that a year and a half. So five stars (for that a year and a half). This is most definitely slice-of-life. I've become fond of the format, but for a lot of readers I have to admit it could feel like watching paint drying. For the slow pacing I'll assign three stars to my story. It does develop after all. The problem with multiple third person point of view stories is that personalities tend to bleed into each other unless you're a fantastic author. I try to keep my characters apart, but I'm nowhere close to being a fantastic author. I believe I'm fair enough though. So, a modest three stars. Placing the story in something extremely similar to an existing setting makes building world a lot easier. It's simply hard to go wrong. Since this one is based upon an archetypical type of manga/anime -kind of story there are certain tropes I follow. There are both benefits as well as drawbacks to doing this. All in all I feel confident in placing four stars here. So, all in all, a self-review from the author that runs at below average compared to the all five stars reviews here. This is my attempt at giving you an honest opinion of my own story.

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