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fantasy_landLv55yr
2019-01-20 23:12

The writing style is great. Initially I had trouble understanding it, but after reading two three times, I became more acquainted with it. Also, would like to mention this is first kind of a novel I have read and highly impressed by it. The plot and character development is good, the way they transition and the talks just hooks the reader. 5 star for all. However, personally I think if you would change your cover to an anime one rather than a photograph, it would attract more readers. Just voicing my opinion. ** you have a new reader, that's me😃 Keep up the good work 👍

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StenDuring
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I know about the cover. It's originally envisioned as an LN series so a coloured manga-style cover makes sense. Now then there's the part of knowing someone who draws that stuff on a professional level for free. I don't ;)

fantasy_land
fantasy_landLv5

There is a thread on the forum : Free covers for your stories by silentscarlett. Try requesting there, her covers are just wonderful and you would love it.

StenDuring
StenDuringAuthor

Hmm, while nothing as fancy as getting an artist, I did apply a filter to the photo. Impressions?

fantasy_land:There is a thread on the forum : Free covers for your stories by silentscarlett. Try requesting there, her covers are just wonderful and you would love it.
fantasy_land
fantasy_landLv5

Looks almost the same. You can keep this, until you find a better one. Choice is yours.

StenDuring
StenDuringAuthor

Yep :D I will search, because I 100% agree that I probably lose readers immediately upon first contact with the current cover.

StenDuring
StenDuringAuthor

Same bloody photo, but definitely looks different now :D Good or bad? I'm clueless. I suck at graphics.

fantasy_land:Looks almost the same. You can keep this, until you find a better one. Choice is yours.
fantasy_land
fantasy_landLv5

Yup. This is definitely better than previous ones and looks attractive too👍

StenDuring:Same bloody photo, but definitely looks different now :D Good or bad? I'm clueless. I suck at graphics.
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StenDuring
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This is a self-assesment, and it's based on the assumption that you, as a reader, aren't used to slice-of-life romance stories. I'm uploading an existing back-log, and the first 150K words or so are line-edited twice. If defining 'Writing Quality' as my mastery of the English language I dare assigning five stars here. Well, there was this back-log. As long as I'm happy with a daily update I can keep this story going for another year without writing a single word more. Make that a year and a half. So five stars (for that a year and a half). This is most definitely slice-of-life. I've become fond of the format, but for a lot of readers I have to admit it could feel like watching paint drying. For the slow pacing I'll assign three stars to my story. It does develop after all. The problem with multiple third person point of view stories is that personalities tend to bleed into each other unless you're a fantastic author. I try to keep my characters apart, but I'm nowhere close to being a fantastic author. I believe I'm fair enough though. So, a modest three stars. Placing the story in something extremely similar to an existing setting makes building world a lot easier. It's simply hard to go wrong. Since this one is based upon an archetypical type of manga/anime -kind of story there are certain tropes I follow. There are both benefits as well as drawbacks to doing this. All in all I feel confident in placing four stars here. So, all in all, a self-review from the author that runs at below average compared to the all five stars reviews here. This is my attempt at giving you an honest opinion of my own story.

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