Bro, you need to chill, theres something called pre-conflict, conflict, post-conflict. but you just put conflict everywhere, chill bro, take your time when writing this novel, put a bit of filler chapter is fine too so that the story doesn't always feels so tense... Yes i know that this was a war and military novel, but if its fills with to much war it will become boring later on, your story feels better after the post-war, the story become alive but pity suddenly its war again... The ones that obstruct the story progression is actually the system itself, the system is TOO user friendly, army, training and so on the mc can just use it instantly(i dont know because the author didn't explain it, cmiiw), when actually its better to just put a chapter how you build and train your army(according to skill books) and make a bonds with them, its just feels weird when you have an army come out of thin air... The story rarely have enemy pov(or non-existent maybe?), and its always party1 and party2, theres no info about the other warlords. well, this is the first time you write a novel so i let this one pass, maybe you can do this later on when you already experienced enough... this novel is fine, but i hope you become better and better on writing this novel... thank you...
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thank you for your comment and I have started to implement more enemy POVS and his army isn't trained yet btw. he just got a new bunch of recruits and was given an army of 10thousand from that and with that inexperienced battle marched out somewhere. so I will implement an army training scene soon like right after this defense arc. thank you for your opinion!
Author, please, press enter when new people are speaking, it will be a loooooot better!
dragonflamemperor:thank you for your comment and I have started to implement more enemy POVS and his army isn't trained yet btw. he just got a new bunch of recruits and was given an army of 10thousand from that and with that inexperienced battle marched out somewhere. so I will implement an army training scene soon like right after this defense arc. thank you for your opinion!
