Only let me posted one review so... 1st; Why is it that every fcking cultivation novels are always the same... hi brother, lil sister, big brother etc IT MAKES NO SENSE. Especially in this story when its meant to be an evolved earth. We do NOT talk like that... talk like a normal person please. Other than this its an alright read, cant say much more as barely anything has happened Authors comment; Well, thanks for the review. As for the brother, lil sister, and big brother, in my hometown those terms are still quite used. And as the first city in the novel is based on where I'm actually from, then I don't find it out of place to use those terms. My comment after; Oh can understand then, for me where I live its very weird. I mean I can read stories that have it but cause ive read to many its got to the point It annoys me whenever I see it. Hopefully later on not everyone will use it ? As its still meant to be earth and there should be many languages if you get me ? Well anyway Ill carry on and see where it goes gl ! Final review xD Okay so carried on reading but when he meets 'wind' it gets confusing af. The english is terrible and very hard to follow, this has happened throughout the story but it was bearable however turned very prominent at this time. Also nothing against it but not into yaoi as im straight... when he meets wind it turns yaoi, with him calling mc big brother and blushing red. Not into that sort of thing but if you are then yeah carry on lel. This does need a tag for it thou, or atleast say has yaoi vibe at points or something. Also this is very slow pace, I don't mind slow pace but it has to move forward atleast. For the whole story now nothing has rly happened. I was hoping when he acc left the slums he would access the internet atleast.. learn something about the world. However the whole time he has been there hes done fck all. Another thing is the ai, it should be a lot more prominent in the story as itll be key for him knowing about the world and helping. However it seems like it's forgotten and is barely used. Only being used to explain something to help the mc. I mean he has used it like once ? why... Finally going back to this 'wind' character it makes zero sense for the mc to start training him... the mc isnt strong. He is still in the first level of both body, soul cultivation and hasnt even begun energy. So why is he helping someone train and follow him ? Also with the mc getting all his techniques from the messai fam other than his sword arts what tf is he gonna train the guy in ? All he knows are secrets he can't teach to outsiders... plus he knows fck all about cultivation. He only knows what he has been given, so he could teach maybe the basics but nothing else. But then again why is he waisting his time.. other than for the yaoi route. Then for awhile now he has been acting like some wise master at everything, being arrogant af. Its like the slums left no mark on him and is just used as a sob story. Its had no effect on the story so far, other than a sad backstory. Overall it seems like cultivation novel with loads of potential but ruined with loads of wholes turning it mediocre. Not meant to be a harsh review, just my honest thought on what ive read. It may be the authors first novel or even improve loads later on as the story goes on.
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Hello Isoma, First of all, I would like to thank you for taking the time to such a thought out and long review, I appreciate all the inputs as long as it's constructive. I also appreciate the fact that you took the time to read up until the 62nd chapter to leave a review. It shows me that you didn't leave a random review after reading the first few words and that your view on my novel is actually built on reading quite a lot of material, even though it is not positive for me! I don't have much else to tell you, except that I'm sorry that you didn't like my work! Although it is my first novel and English isn't my first language, I don't want to use those two facts as an excuse for mediocrity. I strive for improvement, and I like to think that over the chapters, I have become a better and more committed author. I hope that you will try to bear with my novel and see that it becomes better over time! If not, then I hope your future reads will satisfy you!
:) your attitude is amazing, if you carry on like that you will get far! It may have sounded harsh but didnt intend it to, as long as you take all the constructive criticism on board to improve yourself I can't rly say anything ^^ Just ignore all the ppl who arent constructive and hate for no reason!
LividEdge:Hello Isoma, First of all, I would like to thank you for taking the time to such a thought out and long review, I appreciate all the inputs as long as it's constructive. I also appreciate the fact that you took the time to read up until the 62nd chapter to leave a review. It shows me that you didn't leave a random review after reading the first few words and that your view on my novel is actually built on reading quite a lot of material, even though it is not positive for me! I don't have much else to tell you, except that I'm sorry that you didn't like my work! Although it is my first novel and English isn't my first language, I don't want to use those two facts as an excuse for mediocrity. I strive for improvement, and I like to think that over the chapters, I have become a better and more committed author. I hope that you will try to bear with my novel and see that it becomes better over time! If not, then I hope your future reads will satisfy you!
Thanks reviewer for an honest review. Thanks author for not deleting review
