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rageme
ragemeLv35yr
2019-01-20 05:03

Bro keep up the good work I like the way where story is going but please stop those fucking flashbacks and also try to add so new elements and power up to karin and sakura and try to spice up thinks a little keep following the original naruto event timeline and add your touch to it. Peace

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Well I must say this is the best Naruto fanfic I found in qidian so far. What I like about the story is that the author respected the canon. All the characters are just like in the original naruto. I've read a lot of naruto fanfic and let me tell you, most of the authors like to butcher the canon. I don't want Naruto to become arrogant horny MC like in other fanfic and all the kages and jonin turned into retards and take advice from a 5 year old kid. What I envision is the same Naruto but since Naruto already knew the future, he will try to erase his past regrets and save his loved ones. And I hope the author will emphasize more on the relationship and interaction between characters. Their relationship is superficial and not that detailed in the manga since it's a shounen. So I hope I can satisfy my fangirl heart with this novel. Well that's just my wish. You can just write whatever you want For the pacing just take it slow. You don't need to rush the plot and you can even add fillers in between. You can finish the chunin exam in chapter 200 for all I care. The only complain about the writing is author tends to add multiple scenes into a chapter. Switching between scenes in a chapter will destroy the readers immersion. Just focus on one character at a time. We readers doesn't have short term memory lost so we wouldn't forget about the other characters if you did not give them screen time for few chapters. Overall a solid read. And the update rate is consistent. My only hope is for the author to finish this novel and not dropping it like 99% of the originals out there.

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