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PayDay
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TL;DR Expectations: Old hardened war vet with a soft side for kids. Who enjoys his new life as a Pokemon trainer and moves forward past having to leave his wife and family behind. Reality: Teen with delusions of being a war vet was hit by a truck and God played along with his delusions and let him go to the Pokemon world where he finally gets to use the 9 in dick he never had on Earth on the equally delusional females. Grammar needs work some misspellings. The story rather than showing us what's happening tells you. The dialogue could use some work... Some of the conversations don't seem at all realistic. Updates are fine I suppose the Author hasn't gotten to an amount where I can fairly judge it. I can't say the story has really developed at all. It feels more about the ladies in the anime than the Pokemon. Which brings us to Character Design... this is supposed to be an 80 something year old man who gets sent to the Pokemon world. Yet he acts like the 16 year old he made his body into. I don't see any wisdom at all so far even though apparently he has a good amount. You told us he has some fighting ability but the one instance I read of him using it you didn't do a good job of showing it off. Rather than an aged war veteran I'd say we have at most a high schooler with a need to flirt and have ***. World background is Pokemon it hasn't been described much in any sort of way so I'm guessing we just go off what the Anime looks like. So far I'm not impressed with the story or the MC. Fine he's 80 something and probably hasn't done it in a while, but right now it's just an old man who goes to a Pokemon world to have *** with the young beautiful females. If I had to give some advice I'd say fix the dialogue it's not great. The battles need something because right now they seem almost dull. Rather than keeping his memories it feels like he only kept the memories of Pokemon, "fighting" and ***. It doesn't even feel like he had a wife once. Even though this wife was apparently the one who turned him from a hardened rock into whatever he is today. We don't even find out if she was alive or not. I honestly feel like there was no point in making him an old man or a war veteran. Making him a typical **** or geek man who got hit by a truck would give us the same exact MC.

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Drakath75
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lol this review... Level_0 Reading Status: C1 (he reads one chapter ) "I can't say the story has really developed at all." you're joking right? also you put TL;DR at the start of the review then wrote 6 paragraphs.

PayDay
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First of all you freaking idiot you know if you go back to a chapter it will show that as your latest chapter you were on not what you actually read. Second of all I went back to reread the chapter I pointed out in my review. And third the TL;DR is for people who don't want to read the PARAGRAPHS... Use your fucking brain.

Drakath75:lol this review... Level_0 Reading Status: C1 (he reads one chapter ) "I can't say the story has really developed at all." you're joking right? also you put TL;DR at the start of the review then wrote 6 paragraphs.
Drakath75
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lol sure...the guy who wrote his entire review under TL;DR calling me an idiot XD. you didn't even write anything next to TL;DR you just wrote TL;DR on its own and then put 6 paragraphs under it.... good grief you sure you can dish it out, but you can't take it

PayDay:First of all you freaking idiot you know if you go back to a chapter it will show that as your latest chapter you were on not what you actually read. Second of all I went back to reread the chapter I pointed out in my review. And third the TL;DR is for people who don't want to read the PARAGRAPHS... Use your fucking brain.
PayDay
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Are you actually trolling? The TL;DR is for the Expectations/Reality part of my review that is obvious. Which is why I said use your brain. It honestly surprises me that you can be so stupid to not understand what the TL;DR is actually for.

Drakath75:lol sure...the guy who wrote his entire review under TL;DR calling me an idiot XD. you didn't even write anything next to TL;DR you just wrote TL;DR on its own and then put 6 paragraphs under it.... good grief you sure you can dish it out, but you can't take it
Drakath75
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yeah sure blame the other person for you'r inability to write it correctly. also its pretty funny how a hater who can't write a singe comment without swearing is calling me out for trolling XD.

PayDay:Are you actually trolling? The TL;DR is for the Expectations/Reality part of my review that is obvious. Which is why I said use your brain. It honestly surprises me that you can be so stupid to not understand what the TL;DR is actually for.
PayDay
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Ok so you are trolling got it. I'm ignoring you now.

Drakath75:yeah sure blame the other person for you'r inability to write it correctly. also its pretty funny how a hater who can't write a singe comment without swearing is calling me out for trolling XD.
Drakath75
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not really i was just pointing out how badly written you'r review was... first of all you should have put the text next to the TL;DR instead of skipping two lines or just put the TL;DR at the end of the review. second you kept repeatedly complaining about how he is an 80 year old veteran and about girls instead of just stating each point once making the review unnecessarily long. and third you kept putting ****'s for some reason. when you need to censor you'r own review you know its bad not to mention you didn't even do it thoroughly and left in words like "dick" making it pointless.

PayDay:Ok so you are trolling got it. I'm ignoring you now.
PayDay
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Ok if you're being serious instead of whatever you were saying before fine. There's nothing all that wrong with the TL;DR you're being nitpicky everyone else seems to understand. 2nd of all he is SUPPOSED to be 80 year old vet but nothing in the entire novel shows that except the Author pointing it out. The main premise of why I even read this novel was partly because of that. My review is long therefore there is a TL;DR you did not have to keep reading the review as that was what the TL;DR was for. Third I didn't put the ****'s Qidian did that on it's own for some reason so don't blame me for something I didn't do. If that's all I don't honestly see your point. Because you didn't understand my TL;DR and then decided my review was long you're ragging on me?

Drakath75:not really i was just pointing out how badly written you'r review was... first of all you should have put the text next to the TL;DR instead of skipping two lines or just put the TL;DR at the end of the review. second you kept repeatedly complaining about how he is an 80 year old veteran and about girls instead of just stating each point once making the review unnecessarily long. and third you kept putting ****'s for some reason. when you need to censor you'r own review you know its bad not to mention you didn't even do it thoroughly and left in words like "dick" making it pointless.
PayDay
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If you wan't an example try to write out s e x with no spaces. You'll get ***.

Drakath75:not really i was just pointing out how badly written you'r review was... first of all you should have put the text next to the TL;DR instead of skipping two lines or just put the TL;DR at the end of the review. second you kept repeatedly complaining about how he is an 80 year old veteran and about girls instead of just stating each point once making the review unnecessarily long. and third you kept putting ****'s for some reason. when you need to censor you'r own review you know its bad not to mention you didn't even do it thoroughly and left in words like "dick" making it pointless.
PayDay
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Weird it actually let me write it here but not in my review or when I tried it in comments section.

Drakath75:not really i was just pointing out how badly written you'r review was... first of all you should have put the text next to the TL;DR instead of skipping two lines or just put the TL;DR at the end of the review. second you kept repeatedly complaining about how he is an 80 year old veteran and about girls instead of just stating each point once making the review unnecessarily long. and third you kept putting ****'s for some reason. when you need to censor you'r own review you know its bad not to mention you didn't even do it thoroughly and left in words like "dick" making it pointless.
Drakath75
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look at the other reviews for a minute and tell me how many of them are censored because a review getting censored is usually a bad thing... also if you write something you can't expect other people to know what you meant. fact is you did put a two line space between TL;DR and every paragraph below. and finally i just wrote a comment in the comment section and YOU had to get all offended and insult me several times. so excuse me for being a bit "nitpicky" with a person who wrote a highly critical review and then chewed me out for just a bit of negative feedback.

PayDay:Ok if you're being serious instead of whatever you were saying before fine. There's nothing all that wrong with the TL;DR you're being nitpicky everyone else seems to understand. 2nd of all he is SUPPOSED to be 80 year old vet but nothing in the entire novel shows that except the Author pointing it out. The main premise of why I even read this novel was partly because of that. My review is long therefore there is a TL;DR you did not have to keep reading the review as that was what the TL;DR was for. Third I didn't put the ****'s Qidian did that on it's own for some reason so don't blame me for something I didn't do. If that's all I don't honestly see your point. Because you didn't understand my TL;DR and then decided my review was long you're ragging on me?
PayDay
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So the two spaces I put after the TL;DR make it impossible for you to understand fine but you don't have to bull****. Highly critical but has the most likes? Ok you literally get on me because it says chapter 1 and I have TL;DR, then try to make excuses about how it's long even though I gave a TL;DR. Then get mad when I insult your intelligence when anyone reading the review understands where the TL;DR starts. So you decide to nitpick whatever you can like the fact that some words are censored. I'm not offended I'm annoyed at your trolling. If you were actually serious then sure but I can't believe you are. I looked at the other reviews one of them have *** and one of them uses s€x instead of the actual word unlike what I did which ended up being censored. So quit with the Bull when you can't even tell me what's wrong with my review.

Drakath75:look at the other reviews for a minute and tell me how many of them are censored because a review getting censored is usually a bad thing... also if you write something you can't expect other people to know what you meant. fact is you did put a two line space between TL;DR and every paragraph below. and finally i just wrote a comment in the comment section and YOU had to get all offended and insult me several times. so excuse me for being a bit "nitpicky" with a person who wrote a highly critical review and then chewed me out for just a bit of negative feedback.
Quidanstealsnovels
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This website is weird in how fanboys get so defensive over comments on a feedback system. I was going to read it myself but I can see the synopsis is terrible, it's got quite a few errors in there and by the looks of this review is just another typical harem, wankfest for the soyboy's on this website.

Drakath75
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nice you actually managed to find one review among dozens that has a word censored while you'rs has several good for you. and you know what? since you're obviously incapable of the very basic respect among human beings and any manners whatsoever i'm sorry i have to drop down to you'r level. now then.... the only bull____ here is you'r worthless review. and now you're annoyed with me? touchy little bit** aren't you? you read one chapter and what do you do? you write 6 paragraphs of critics (and yes highly critical you had nothing positive to say and all you did was whine about same things over and over). hell i wouldn't be surprised at all if all those likes came from fake accounts you made. its not like that would be below a person who just insults. also when you write a document or a review or an official letter or anything along that line you can't use curses and you can't swear so get some basic self control and maybe you wont be an outcast anymore who spends all his time insulting people on the internet. you're obviously an egotistical person who cant take even a little bit of criticism and a hypocrite who likes to criticize others. so why don't you stop wasting my time with you'r rubbish and instead of crying about "nitpicking" learn how to write a decent review so people don't HAVE to nitpick. Oh and also get some basic self control so you don't get all offended the moment someone points out you'r mistakes. also how about so stop pointing out how i get mad after getting 3 comments full of insults and look at yourself who gets enraged without even being insulted once you worthless little hypocrite!

PayDay:So the two spaces I put after the TL;DR make it impossible for you to understand fine but you don't have to bull****. Highly critical but has the most likes? Ok you literally get on me because it says chapter 1 and I have TL;DR, then try to make excuses about how it's long even though I gave a TL;DR. Then get mad when I insult your intelligence when anyone reading the review understands where the TL;DR starts. So you decide to nitpick whatever you can like the fact that some words are censored. I'm not offended I'm annoyed at your trolling. If you were actually serious then sure but I can't believe you are. I looked at the other reviews one of them have *** and one of them uses s€x instead of the actual word unlike what I did which ended up being censored. So quit with the Bull when you can't even tell me what's wrong with my review.
Drakath75
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also the fact that you need a TL;DR note is sad enough on its own. instead of making a few key points you post a god damn rant (yes i said it). and so what if i "nitpick" and tell you what you did a bad job at? you made a whole damn rant nitpicking and complaining about what the novel did wrong but you couldn't even take two sentences you touchy little hypocrite!

PayDay:So the two spaces I put after the TL;DR make it impossible for you to understand fine but you don't have to bull****. Highly critical but has the most likes? Ok you literally get on me because it says chapter 1 and I have TL;DR, then try to make excuses about how it's long even though I gave a TL;DR. Then get mad when I insult your intelligence when anyone reading the review understands where the TL;DR starts. So you decide to nitpick whatever you can like the fact that some words are censored. I'm not offended I'm annoyed at your trolling. If you were actually serious then sure but I can't believe you are. I looked at the other reviews one of them have *** and one of them uses s€x instead of the actual word unlike what I did which ended up being censored. So quit with the Bull when you can't even tell me what's wrong with my review.
PayDay
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Lol the best part of your whole spiel is how you completely contradict yourself in every part of it. You're insulted by me calling you an idiot well then sorry snowflake don't comment back something stupid and I won't. You talk about dozens of reviews when this novel is barely in the double digits with most of the reviews telling nothing about the novel. Also if you consider the word (s e x) as a curse than please never have kids. You've pointed out no mistakes whatsoever in my review only things you dislike about it. I gave some advice on what I think would help fix the novel, what does me not writing anything positive have to do with it. I read the novel because the premise seemed interesting a veteran with experience going into a Pokemon world. I did not get a novel about a veteran so what was I supposed to like about it? The fact that the MC is hard all the time? I'll give you the benefit of the doubt and say I was highly critical if you can tell me the point of a novel where you can change the MC background story to literally any high school virgin and it would make even more sense than the MC's given background? Seriously though I enjoy arguing especially with people who are wrong, you really look dumb when you have no reason to hate on my review. I read the novel, I did not enjoy the novel, I wrote a review saying what I didn't enjoy. I explained the reason why I didn't enjoy it and even gave some points that could improve the novel if the Author wanted to rewrite it. You are literally angry at me over what? The review was more for the Author he has an interesting premise but doesn't follow up on it, instead making a virgin's wet dream. Sorry but it's not what I came fore and I'm sure it's the same with others. Either way you haven't bothered me at all I just felt like commenting because I wanted to see your reaction when I called you on this bull.

Drakath75:nice you actually managed to find one review among dozens that has a word censored while you'rs has several good for you. and you know what? since you're obviously incapable of the very basic respect among human beings and any manners whatsoever i'm sorry i have to drop down to you'r level. now then.... the only bull____ here is you'r worthless review. and now you're annoyed with me? touchy little bit** aren't you? you read one chapter and what do you do? you write 6 paragraphs of critics (and yes highly critical you had nothing positive to say and all you did was whine about same things over and over). hell i wouldn't be surprised at all if all those likes came from fake accounts you made. its not like that would be below a person who just insults. also when you write a document or a review or an official letter or anything along that line you can't use curses and you can't swear so get some basic self control and maybe you wont be an outcast anymore who spends all his time insulting people on the internet. you're obviously an egotistical person who cant take even a little bit of criticism and a hypocrite who likes to criticize others. so why don't you stop wasting my time with you'r rubbish and instead of crying about "nitpicking" learn how to write a decent review so people don't HAVE to nitpick. Oh and also get some basic self control so you don't get all offended the moment someone points out you'r mistakes. also how about so stop pointing out how i get mad after getting 3 comments full of insults and look at yourself who gets enraged without even being insulted once you worthless little hypocrite!
PayDay
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I'm a hypocrite when your sentences start off talking about how I didn't read the novel before writing the review. Then proceed to not understand what part was the TL;DR and what part was the beginning of the review. It was pretty obvious your inability to comprehend isn't my fault. So you consider my review a rant when I separated everything into points reviewed the glaring errors and then gave some quick advice? The fact that someone as incompetent as you can even read is a commendation to your teacher. Too bad that doesn't correlate into being able to even understand the reason for my "rant" as you call it. I reiterated parts multiple times yet your peabrain still couldn't understand what I was talking about. By the way I've had fun playing around with you I'm not touchy I've enjoyed watching someone who hasn't brought up the novel the entire time try to talk **** about a review LOL!

Drakath75:also the fact that you need a TL;DR note is sad enough on its own. instead of making a few key points you post a god damn rant (yes i said it). and so what if i "nitpick" and tell you what you did a bad job at? you made a whole damn rant nitpicking and complaining about what the novel did wrong but you couldn't even take two sentences you touchy little hypocrite!
Drakath75
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actually my inability to comprehend you'r worthless poorly written excuse of a review is you'r fault since you're incompetent one for even writing that trash. besides none of what you said just now changes the fact that you're a hypocrite that you lack basic self control and manners and that you went nuts and insulted me for posting just a single comment it also doesn't change the fact that you're a touchy little bi*** who can only dish it out but can't take it... and yes i did point out what i don't like about you'r review and if you don't like it get better if not then shut up and don't give and even IF all the complaints you had about the novel were true it still doesn't change the fact that you'r review was badly written or the fact that you took 6 paragraphs to list 3 complaints.

PayDay:I'm a hypocrite when your sentences start off talking about how I didn't read the novel before writing the review. Then proceed to not understand what part was the TL;DR and what part was the beginning of the review. It was pretty obvious your inability to comprehend isn't my fault. So you consider my review a rant when I separated everything into points reviewed the glaring errors and then gave some quick advice? The fact that someone as incompetent as you can even read is a commendation to your teacher. Too bad that doesn't correlate into being able to even understand the reason for my "rant" as you call it. I reiterated parts multiple times yet your peabrain still couldn't understand what I was talking about. By the way I've had fun playing around with you I'm not touchy I've enjoyed watching someone who hasn't brought up the novel the entire time try to talk **** about a review LOL!
Drakath75
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and i enjoyed watching someone who only has an excuse other people are "idiots" for being unable to read minds and know what you meant and then changing the subject about me not talking about the novel as if that changes the fact that you'r review was poorly written... :)

PayDay:I'm a hypocrite when your sentences start off talking about how I didn't read the novel before writing the review. Then proceed to not understand what part was the TL;DR and what part was the beginning of the review. It was pretty obvious your inability to comprehend isn't my fault. So you consider my review a rant when I separated everything into points reviewed the glaring errors and then gave some quick advice? The fact that someone as incompetent as you can even read is a commendation to your teacher. Too bad that doesn't correlate into being able to even understand the reason for my "rant" as you call it. I reiterated parts multiple times yet your peabrain still couldn't understand what I was talking about. By the way I've had fun playing around with you I'm not touchy I've enjoyed watching someone who hasn't brought up the novel the entire time try to talk **** about a review LOL!
PayDay
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Wow you still didn't comprehend a word I said did you? I literally said "I'll give you the benefit of the doubt and say I was highly critical if you can tell me the point of a novel where you can change the MC background story to literally any high school virgin and it would make even more sense than the MC's given background?" You're too busy trying to get back at me with your bad insults that you can't even answer the question. Then you get mad at me for the book are you serious? Explain to me what's good about the book give me an example of something. You've talked all this **** about how my "rant" is poorly written but I don't see your review on it at all. If you're going to get on me for a review then write one I want to read what you have to say about this novel. If you don't have anything about the novel to say don't message me. Seriously you're not even entertaining anymore it's just sad.

Drakath75:and i enjoyed watching someone who only has an excuse other people are "idiots" for being unable to read minds and know what you meant and then changing the subject about me not talking about the novel as if that changes the fact that you'r review was poorly written... :)