The story has potential. I find the pace a bit fast, I guess, but definitely, the plot is interesting. But please, please check the grammar and spelling because even at the first chapter, it has lots of typos already. Nevertheless, it can be fixed later. It's just that, it most probably will affect the fluidity of the reading experience. Moreover, I noticed, there is subtle switching of POV's? Please be careful as it might cause unnecessary confusion to the readers. Overall, it's good and keep improving. Thumbs up.
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