Review Detail of StenDuring in The Last Embrace

In a world that is not our own, yet with all the trappings of ours, there are vampires and humans living side by side, and there is an unnamed mansion. In that mansion a vampire boy grows up with a human girl -- and feelings eventually grow. This review is part of a review swap and valid as of chapter 18. A slice-of-life romance with all that entails in slow pacing and everyday life. After eighteen chapters we've been offered two arcs, the first about the main characters' buddying love, and a rather haphazard second one about the first obstacle to their newfound love. The story is told in multiple third person point of view, in the past tense. So for the distribution of the stars. The English used is shaky. It's evident the author isn't a native to the language. Mixing present and past tense, misusage of pronouns and even singular and plural all detract from the reading experience. Add systematic head-hopping as far as PoV-shifts are handled, and some of the scenes become confusing, forcing the reader to backtrack in order to understand what happened. Three stars. Eighteen chapters promptly delivered. No complaints. Five stars. We're still at the very beginning of the story, but this far it has progressed naturally and mostly kept to the slice-of-life pacing. Five stars. The two main characters are fleshed out. Side characters have been given a minimum of screen time, and for that reason very few oportunities to develop personalities. Five stars. It's a world where vamipres live openly among humans. Some kind of government body has ordered mass vaccinations turning being a vampiric vampire into suicide. It's clearly not our world, but despite this our brand names and cultural trappings remain unchanged. It simply rubs me the wrong way as a reader. Now almost all of the story is set in an unnamed mansion by an unnamed lake surrouned by an unnamed forest, and none of it really gets visualised. It's definitely a weakness of the story, so three stars. In the end I want to find out what happens to the couple, so I've added the story to my libary.