_TranscendentLv145yr

2019-05-17 16:21

Well, first things first. The five stars are not my actual rating but a sign of encouragement to the author. Being an Author myself, I know that reviews and comments can have a large influence on Authors who take them to heart. So, I will try to give you constructive criticism while trying to not let my bias influence my suggestions as much as possible. Writing Quality: 3.5 stars. I'm not saying that it is bad. It's readable. But you can easily improve it to 4 stars by making sure you don't miss or misuse Punctuation. And if you start improving, then you would be at 4.5 sooner or later. You can still make mistakes in other areas, but making sure that punctuation is proper would make the reader more comfortable. You can use Grammarly or something similar to reduce the mistakes in your writing. Look out for typos. Stability of Updates: 3.5 stars. Well, this is not a topic that can be easily provoked. Lol. Everyone has their own things to do. So, it would not be right of me to 'demand' that you release a chapter even when you are busy. However, if you want your reader base to grow and your story to become popular, it is vital to maintain a stable release rate. At least tell the readers when you can't upload a chapter so that they won't be wasting their time. Informing when you would be uploading the chapters would be cool. But if you can't do that, it's also fine as long as you update regularly making sure that you keep your word. By the way, I am also trying to follow the suggestion I gave you. :D Story Development: 4 stars. As I said earlier, I read only 7 chapters. So far, given the short chapters, the story is already proceeding at a fine pace. It is a fine read. I didn't feel that it was dragging out. But you can definitely make it more interesting, the question is what you are going to do. Character design: 3.75 stars(if it's possible XD) I think you can work on this to make your story more relatable to the readers. Usually, the more complex a character, the more you can explore them. The ideals, beliefs and morals is what makes them more 'human' than a mere writing. A character ought to have their own thoughts based on their independent and unique characters. Their decision making, their fears, everything counts when you want to make a character which should be like a real person. You see, often characters are seen existing for the 'Plot'. But that makes them lacking in personalities. So, a character, even if it is a famous celebrity or a cold CEO, needs to have their own lives and not change just for the sake of plot. If you are trying to write a realistic romance, you should really make it a point that the arrival of the main character shouldn't trigger them for no reason and make their lives revolve around her. She is also a Human! Just like they are. So, if you want to make her special, do it with who she is. You can make her beautiful, you can make her character have a lot of depth or you can make her character amusing, ....there are a plethora of ways to make a character in your story become genuinely interested in the Main character you are writing. So, going after beauty might seem like a low take on it because not everyone would do that and repeating it might be a waste of opportunity to do something better. However, it is a choice of your opinion. Up to you. But for me as a reader, in a romance story, characters are more important than plot itself. World Background: 4.5 stars. Well, nothing to say about this. It's set in the real world. Final thoughts: Congratulations on writing a decent piece of work. You have your own shortcomings and advantages, like everyone does. You can chose to write the same way you do or try to improve. Remember, 'If you are better than you were yesterday, you are doing well.' All the best, hoping to read more in the future.

The Days Will Come Back Together

shweshaz

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43 Chs