It's a good novel grammatically, with decent world building and characters. One major problem. Everything. Takes. So. Damn. Long. End a chapter on a cliffhanger and then spend the next 20 chapters on a side character. Story arcs that go for way too long. He'll craft an item and then 10 chapters later you'll see the stats for it. He sets something up, the system will say: done in 24 hours. At the end of the 24 hours it turns out it wasn't enough time and will need 30 days. And at the end of the 30 days? Wasn't enough time, now the time is: UNKNOWN. Wtf. At the end of a chapter he'll open up a treasure chest and gasp, oh my hod, it's a...... And the chapter will end, and 30 chaogerd later the item he gets will come up with what it is.
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