Review Detail of Space_Fox in RWBY: A Man With A System
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The way the story is portrayed is terrible, thw charcters always speak (not that it is a bad thing), but that the only thing in the chapter, there is no narrator, everything is portrayed between conversation of 2 characters. The structer of the writing is really bad, thing like space between ":" "{}" is zero. Moreover when you open a bracket or parentesis you almost never close it, and you somehow alternate between " " and { } for no reason. The story is blank with no twist or anything in it; same for common sense, like: a 2 years old figthing a grimm, like wtf?
RWBY: A Man With A System
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Well i hope you liked something about it? And im just happy you atleast gave it a chance, and yes im pretty new at story telling so i try tell as much as i can, and yes the common sense in this is not good at the begining and will change that in the future, and when that happens, i hope you come back to give it another shot, i try to let people know that i try atleast.