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2019-07-05 16:27

At first I was confused by all the capitalizations, underscores and excessive exclamation marks. The Gramma isn't an issue here, it's actually quite good for WN content but here's the thing: This novel reads like someone's brainstorm draft. It's looks like the forming skeleton of a novel to be written. There's a main idea, there's a flow and parts& pieces of well thought out details. It is essentially the type of eastern cultivation novel that's so popular with readers. But if you can't get used to reading the style, it looks like only a base frame, the draft of a novel. There's so many chapters and so much to work with. The world build up is very well thought out while the lack on characterization could be fleshed out by going back and filling in the book more. Obviously the author put a lot of planning into this work, it just needs to be fleshed out.

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