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2019-09-04 11:10

This story is well- written especially from the start to the scene after Chang's escape in Lahat. I am just a bit disappointed in the decisons of Chang and the reaction of Jian. Wish they will end up well.

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Hello, your novel has been reviewed by Virtual Bookshelf. A review excerpt is as follows: Writing and Style: You have a certain style to your writing and employ a nice range of vocabulary. Settings and Flow of Scenes – Overall, this is very well done. You have vivid descriptions and the scene transitions are fluid for the most part. Characters: Great visual descriptions for all of them. Chang – The throwing of herself into the dumpster is a great hook into her character as it shows some quirkiness and ability to disregard appearances for the sake of her plans. At times she feels too mellow for a character; mellow meaning nothing particularly stands out about her yet nothing necessarily negative either. Other times, she’s rather funny in her actions, almost like a child. These all aren’t bad things, and while this female lead is above average to the many of which are poorly created and developed, Chang has so much more potential to even be better. Currently, she’s a very well made cookie cutter female lead in a romance story. Chapter 72, the story about her father is nice, but it isn’t very necessary to the story in terms of giving any more insight to her character nor for introducing a character which is dead. Deceased characters can certainly spur development of characters and plot, but this one didn’t. It’s a nice Segway into Jian’s return, but this could be accomplished in other ways which more relevantly tie into future developments. We see a little more personality in her attempt to escape in chapter 101. It links back to the character she showed when she dumped herself in the dumpster—determination. Jian – He comes off as the typical mysterious, attractive, and possessive male lead. It does seem a little odd that he would get this obsessively attached after being married for one month with Chang. He becomes more charming as the story progresses as he tries his best to make her trust him. Justin – Initially, his character comes off as a best guy friend, flirty but nice—I’m sorry if it wasn’t your intention, but he’s almost reminiscent of how a gay best friend would be. There’s nothing wrong with this, and while not everyone would get that inkling, I thought I should point this out anyway. Later on, my feelings were asserted by his behavior toward Jian, so good job distinguishing his character! After the first few dozen chapters, he’s forgotten until Chapter 150. This isn’t…the best thing to do with semi-important/fleshed out side characters. Li Hua and Jid – Done well, but nothing in particular which really distinguishes them as very memorable or unique to their roles characters. Jid’s role heavily lacked after instilling the idea that he would significantly help Jian be with Chang. .........(cont.) The full review: https://virtualbookshelf.home.blog/2019/03/26/review-siren-song-kayalicia/ Thank you, and the best of luck on your writing endeavors! :)

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