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2020-08-29 04:55

Well it is a great story, nice details and such, although a bit too much drama for my tastes. Still I noticed that you included some details in starbound mods that actually make sense. Although their is a detail I noticed, I don't believe Novakids have mouths. And there are a few spelling errors scattered around. Still not bad, definitely something to read.

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ArthurHFSS
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Thanks for the review. Yes, I made some changes in the Lore, as well in the physical appearance and behavior of some races. I made the changes so that it could fit better in the story I was telling and other changes were just for the convenience of writing.

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Have any of you ever read a book that breathes? One that jus took seemed realistic enough to take a life on its own? Because this is one of them. I am not saying this as an exaggeration. I mean it as it stands, as I find this book incredible and much more deserving of views. Let me preface this by saying, I did not play the original game it was ‘based’ on. I also use the word based loosely, just as this book takes a story on its own, and there was no need for any backgrounds info or experience from the original source, and I was immersed by the time I was at Ch 12-13. Now, the grammar is great. Indisputably so. It is a sight for sore eyes on this side laden with bad syntax. As for the characters, I do love a Main who is willing to be ruthless when it counts. We all know that’s a ***** hero isn’t interestingly anymore, but I have read many originals which try to skew as far away as possible, turning our Main into a hateful massmurderer, which in my opinion is worse. This book finds an acceptable (even interesting and innovative, I think) middle ground between altruistic superman and homicidal maniac. For the world building, I quite honestly don’t know which is original and which has its origins in the game. So although lovely I will refrain from any comments. But what I can judge is the interactions between the characters in the world, there conversations, attitudes, relationships, and I can say that I feel submerged in a world that is not earth. What I do struggle with, but that is really small, is the writing style as sometimes I find the same words repeated over in a narrative passage (a personal ire taught to me since elementary school). But let us be real, it would not be a problem in the myriad of different, much worse, originals, so it won’t be one for me here either. You know what the say, when everything’s perfect, the mistakes just turn more glaring, and what would never ge an issue in mediocrity can be in great works. So I will leave my review at 5 stars. No less, no more. I think this may have gotten me into si-fi ^^’

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