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2019-08-05 13:45

I have to say the synopsis was right up my alley. Two random strangers getting married and all the chaos that would undeniably occur plus the amnesia drama sounded fun. But the writing let the story down and I was unable to connect emotionally to the story characters, The writer describe the characters and locations wonderfully but failed to touch on the emotional aspects at all. Her mother died but she pretty much only did the simple funeral and forgot about her. There is no love in her actions at all. Generally when people loose others especially loved ones, there are tears and people throw themselves into the funeral process to celebrate their life. This my mothers favourite song, her favourite food etc and you sort through the deceased possessions to see find and keep her most important things or the things that reminded you of her, objects with shared memories. Or even just to say how much you miss her.

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Thank you for the constructive criticism 🥰 I will try to improve along the way. I learn a lot from your review *hugs*

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