When reviewing, I always give each category one extra star to the score. Except for newbie writers, who receive two stars. Writing Quality 4: Writing has very little grammar mistakes, such as swapping "you're" for "your", but again, these are very rare. Beyond that, there are some awkward sentences. Not that they're wrong, just that it doesn't feel like what a person would say, such as, "What is your level of skill in the kitchen?" or "Stop it! You are confusing enough! My heart can't take any more cuteness!" And finally, I would recommend breaking down some of the paragraphs, so that they don't become blocks of text. Especially when there are two speakers in the same paragraph. Stability of Updates 5: Personally, I don't like this category, as sometimes the writer needs more time to finish up a chapter, but may end up sacrificing the quality to keep the release rate, so I always give it a 5. Story Development 4: Story flows well enough, and it manages to hold the reader's attention, despite some of the events sounding a bit far fetched, such as how MC tricks the brothel owner at the beginning. Character Design 5: Characters are quite distinct from one another and interesting. World Background 3: This category could be improved, in hopes to paint a better picture of the environment in the reader's mind. Better doesn't mean a nicer picture, but one that the reader can more clearly understand. Review score (4+5+4+5+3)/5 = 4.2 Score given = (5+5+5+5+4)/5 = 4.8
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My weakness! I get too excited and make blocks! I will get to editing, thank you. As for the world, ahhh another weakness. That's why I admire anyone who can bring to life the world around them.... Cough... Cough... Duality.... Take a look... Cough. Thank you for the needed critique, I will improve!
