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Karen_Carson_5265
Karen_Carson_5265Lv24yr
2020-12-01 17:25

its a nice story, and your writing skills are equally great. climax and suspense check but sometimes some chapters are unnecessary. you could do a time skip on those type of chapters. as a reader its boring to read what i might as well have guessed myself and its also time consuming for both the reader and writer

Like a Ray in My Night

yansusustories
4.8
241 Chs

Liked it!

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yansusustories
yansusustoriesAuthor

Oh, do you remember any specific chapters that felt like that to you so I could check them over?

4yr
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crimson_carnation
crimson_carnationLv6

As an avid fan of this author's work, I have been looking forward to this story for ages! Like a Ray in My Night is an expansion of a short story that appears in one of the author's other novels called 'Lovely Writing System'. The story, as much of it as there is now, is very well-written like always. The opening scene is very gripping and as the story goes on, we are sucked further into the world and the plight of our main character. It's obvious from the first chapter itself that the world is crafted very well and the flow of the story just pulls you in. Since I have already gotten a little taste of the two main characters from the short story, I can say that they are very likable and have their own distinct personalities. I'm not sure how the story is going to proceed in the novel, but I have complete faith in the author's storytelling skills. All in all, it's definitely worth a read, especially if you're into cultivation novels with BL romance like me~

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starfrost
starfrostLv2

This story is very good. It's very sweet and fluffy. The MC is as cute as a bunny and he's very innocent. But I can see there is more depth in his character. The ML is very kind and good to the MC which is rare and appreciated. I hope it will not change and that they will keep on being sweet together. The relationship is so pure! It has been very lighthearted and funny until now. But I'm also excited to see how the prophecy and other foreshadowings will come out in the future. The world-building is good and I'm thankful it did not start right away in the beginning but gave us more time to like and care about the characters and world. The characters get more depth as the story continues and it is nice to see their journey and development. Especially the MC. I like how the ML teaches him to protect himself and be independent instead of making him dependant on him. That's unique! Thank you author! I am looking forward to more chapters and where this story will go ^_^

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amoafo20
amoafo20Lv5

Oooooooh I can't believe that I just finished reading the story already ooohh noo . Haha that was an incredible story well done author thumbs up. But please author try and increase your update pace

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MissRavenShadow
MissRavenShadowLv5

A great story that I expected to see since I appeared in "Lovely Writing System". The story is interesting and entertaining, let's wait to see if the author will continue using the one-shot background or changes will appear, however I hope the author continues with the good work so far. Thank you and good luck.

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Kikki
KikkiLv4

Love it! It's sweet how they are smitten with each other. The world background it's lacking bit I think that's ok with how many chapters has.

6yr
Lanyu
LanyuLv5

Looking forward to your new story.£;&&;&)@&(&(&&(&(&(&,&,&&;&;&;&:&:&:&:&:&:&:&;&:£!:!:&;&;&;&(&('fif****£:£:£/£/-)/)&:&:&:&:&:£/!/!/!/!/!!//!£:&:&;&;&;&;&;&;&;&;&;'sjskJsjsk/&&/:&.!!.£.&.&:&;&;8;&(&(&(&(&(&(&4&:'dndjsns

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ForestShadow
ForestShadowLv6

2nd Like your stories .................................................................................................... ............................................................................................................................See you in the comments.

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Asahi_Azumane
Asahi_AzumaneLv2

Ahh I can't believe this story will have its own series!!! （๑✧∀✧๑） Thank you soooooo muchhhh Author-san for making this story into a whole series ah. (づ￣ ³￣)づ

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Daoist294490
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Will Yun Bei Fen pervail in being the guiding light for the destined savior of the  Teng Yong Sect, Mei Chao Bing? Since his former master betrayed the sect and comitted murder, rival disciple Yang Wu Huang will not let any disciple forget that Mei Chao Bing may become a traitor & murderer too. Jealous of Mei Chao Bing's abilities & talent, Yang Wu Huang takes every opportunity to kick him down. Life has been very dark for Mei Chao Bing. Elder Baili's talent for chosing uniquely quirky, but highly effective disciples seemed to fail when he brought the cute orphan Yun Bei Fen to the sect. Although a hard working disciple, Yun Bei Fen manages Master Baili better than Master Baili can manage Yun Bei Fen's cuteness, and the fact that Fen'er has one driving desire, to adore Mei Chao Bing. The author weaves a compelling tale, with characters that draw you into their world. Adore the ridiculous situations & sometimes outrageous behavior, that makes me laugh.

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Random_Wanderer
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It is a great story. Am already reading it in the wattpat and it it worth your time. The main characters are greatly crafted. The plot is great too. And oh yes there is an extra with 42parts which is ongoing in wattpat. It is hilarious. It gives us a glimpse of main character childhood with his three troublesome senior martial brothers together with their master. Also worth reading.

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