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SweetdaddyJupiter
SweetdaddyJupiterLv116yr
2018-11-12 22:45

The poor editing and overall lack of flow make it difficult for me to recommend this one to anybody. The 4.8 rating mystifies me. Does it improve dramatically further in? I couldn't be bothered to find out.

Unbeatable! Invincible! Unparalleled!

_Ram_
4.7
413 Chs

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_Ram_
_Ram_Author

Well, I wrote it for free and had no one to proofread it, so some errors here and there are inevitable :( But for the storyline, now that is something that I am most confident in! Read more further in, and I'm pretty sure you will write me a 4 star review after that! Anyway, Thanks for reading! ;)

6yr
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_Ram_
_Ram_Author

Hello guys, Author here! Finally giving myself a self review of 4 star, because I acknowledge that my writing quality isn't perfect and my release is only around 10 chaps per week! Furthermore, I realize that my character design is quite bland for now, but that is actually on purpose! (Really!) Why? Because I plan to go professional one day, and this is my free version of the novel! So you can expect for it not to be that detailed right? (After all, I'm writing it for free lol). After I finish this first arc (chapter 1 ~ 30) I will re-edit it (I will hire editor such as proofreaders and grammar checker) and add more flavors to the novel. I plan to publish the edited version somewhere which is a paid version (WHICH WILL BE WORTH IT!). Will I stop publishing here you ask? The answer issssssss ~ No! I will continue to publish chapters here for free as usual, just that the quality will remain like this, and I hope that is tolerable lol. Where will I publish the perfected version of the first arc in the future you ask? I will inform you guys about that soon! Don't worry! To all my loyal readers, be that free or premium readers in the future, I thank you for your support and spending your time reading my work! I truly appreciate it from the bottom of my heart! You guys are the reason why I have the motivation to continue writing! And if you really really really reaaaallyyyy love my work, I hope you can become part of my premium reader where I will create an online community specifically for us to hang around! Until then, do continue to support me! Thank you and enjoy reading! ;)

6yr

AlwaysReading
AlwaysReadingLv11

I like this novel a lot. My only grief with it is that the updates aren't released at ludicrous speed. Am I at 140 yet... how about now? Just a little bit more I think

6yr
david_larias
david_lariasLv4

Please dont drop this... Hope the author got contract soon from qi 140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140

6yr
DreamT
DreamTLv5

The writing quality is some next level ****, author does a very good job with grammar, general story telling, and the speed at which the story moves forward, not too fast and not too slow. From reading the first few chapters alone you can tell that this author not only has writing experience, but that he puts that experience to good use. The stability of updates so far is great especially for a side project, however it’s still quite early to tell for sure and I can only hope that the author will keep up with this as time goes on. Story development is quite good so far, not too fast or too slow, however this is another one of the things that only time will truly tell.

6yr
ConstiP
ConstiPLv5

Really good book, got me hooked. Sadly, there are so many mistakes in this text, sometimes I have to read a sentence multiple times just to understand the meaning... Please get yourself an editor! I do like your style however.

6yr
TheRedHand
TheRedHandLv11

I really like this new story. It has the cultivation end of things which I like but it also has a mix of a mage feeling to it. It has a good mysterious plot happening which I really like and it has the face slapping without being as vicious as a lot of cultivation novels are at this point. Not that I don't like all the good fight scenes in my novels but it is a nice change from the status quo. I also really like the school idea in this book. It is different from the sects that you usually read about.

6yr
Rahkheid
RahkheidLv13

Im actually happy with the non-system tag cause i think system stories are just lazy. i mean just think of any of the great system novels and just imagine them with a well fleshed out magic or cultivation system and not the ones with exp points or whatever they use

6yr
sbruno1969
sbruno1969Lv11

I have really enjoyed reading this book, seriously over powered MC, the chicken is hilarious. I can get by the few spelling errors and the other translation errors,not hard to figure it out. When I first started reading, the updates were pretty good, now I'm barely seeing 2 chapters a week. Have to wait a few weeks so they build up so I can read for more than 30 minutes.

5yr
Chenglei
ChengleiLv11

I would personally rate this Novel A Rank. However, I have only read the first couple of chapters. So far, the protaganist seems to have a weird mother fetish.... (Perhaps the Author has it too...) But the Novel in itself seems pretty interesting. The protaganist does seem to have a "golden finger" or the power-up in the first chapter, and the mysterious power that it will give the MC has already awakened so you won't need to wait 40+ Chapters for the Novel to get interesting. And the Grammar is excellent!

6yr
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