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Krutch
KrutchLv45yr
2018-11-22 04:41

Started off interesting, but MC gets way too powerful, way too fast. Nothing interesting about a kage tier 8 year old. There's no *******, no attachment, no emotional investment. The story is just extremely hollow with no redeemable aspects. (And before you say he isn't at least kage tier, he's able to easily beat itachi, who destroyed his entire clan single handedly when they were plotting rebellion. If the uchicha can't handle even 1 kage, how do they plan to beat the third, fourth (since he's alive in this story), jiraiya, and kushina?)

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Theadesy22
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bruh itachi didn't fight every Uchiha in a real way most of them were killed without them even knowing what happened even fugaku didn't put up a fight really the was just a assassination of every Uchiha so if he were to fight the whole clan he would most definitely lose at that point in time

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I'm going to try to keep this short and sweet the story itself is not bad for a fan fiction with less than 10 chapters so far. I gave it a full 5 stars for both stability of updates and story development. So far the author has given us 7 chapters in less than a week which is great and the story is flowing along at a steady pace. Personally I feel the author could go back and flesh out his early development a bit more to show how he learned everything he did before the academy but that's just me nitpicking. I knocked off one star for character design and two stars on world background like I always do for fan fictions due to the majority of the characters not being original characters and just copying a pre-existing world. Yes you can argue that is just me nitpicking again but I don't feel it is fair to give someone full credit for just altering a pre-existing work. Lastly I took three stars off for writing quality due to all the errors present in the currently posted chapters. Everything from missing words to miss spelling words. While normally I would only take off one star for this the sheer number of errors in 7 chapters is ridiculous. Yes I understand english may not be the authors primary language all it would take is a bit of proof reading to spot some of these. To the author I went through as I was reading and made note of any spelling and grammer errors I found and listed them in the comments for each chapter along with suggested corrections for said errors. If you go through and correct said errors I will be more than happy to edit my review of the novel. For those checking the reviews before deciding to read this novel or not I will say it is a great novel so far for those who like way overpowered MCs from the start.

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