Review Detail of LuoYeYouLing in Sweet Desire

The novel is captivating. It has the potential to be something big. However, you might want to get a proof reader or read the chapters over again. I have left a comment on one of the chapters on a spelling error. Also, comma is important. Overall, I like the character of Mei Sou Fei, and that you did not focus on the purity of the body. But maybe develop more on her emotions? As a reader, I want to know more on what she felt when she was touched by the men. All in all, I would like to see more of her growth. I would be following the story but do update more often!!!! Hahaha… Yours, Luo Ye