Review Detail of opolo in Sweet Desire

The sentences really need to be properly structured. Focus a little more on how to start and end a sentence. Explain the description of an object more, use Grammarly to spell check and find grammar errors. The story is well thought but try to present it a brilliant way too. Because a story is good enough when readers can read it without frustrating themselves with a messy writing. Well, i hope you improve these points and give us with many good stories in the future too. But you don't need to worry, i am being a little mean but i also write a novel and the things i pointed out someone pointed out these for me too. btw Good luck and keep working hard