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holachica
holachicaLv45yr
2019-01-30 11:10

Yeah, so this novel isn't all that great, I mean it's not horrid, but not that good. 1. My biggest beef is the spirit stones, and the amount you have to pay despite the limited word count of each chapter. Not to mention actual money being paid for such a standard, mediocre book. 2. This novel is really, just your standard FL eastern fantasy novel where the FL was wronged in a past life, is reincarnated, proceeds to get revenge. Oh, and there's also a ML involved somewhere in between. 3. The word "inwardly" is used so much that every time I see it I want to puke. Ex. She sneered inwardly, she laughed inwardly, etc. Hit up a thesaurus for goodness sakes. 4. the characters, other than the ML and FL, are so one dimensional. 5. there are so may pointless events that really don't need to be included 6. there is so much unnecessary commentary from the "crowd". I mean, just one paragraph is enough, but devoting upwards of 5 paragraphs on useless gossip? That doesn't even pertain to the plot? Seems like a pathetic way to reach word count, not that the latter was high in the first place either way. 7. They "PLEASE ADOPT ME" at the end of literally every chapter pisses me off. Like, darling, I hate to break it to you but your work isn't good enough for that. At least come up with a quality original work, that ISN'T cliche, then speak about payment. Not to mention that this novel, for some god forsaken reason, is already premium. 8. Also need we devote 17439205 paragraphs to the degrading of the FL? Just a sentence or two is enough. But for some reason, every time the antagonists (the Xuan family) come into play, half of the chapter will just be "omg how I wanna slap her, that slut, blah blah". 9. Oh, also, I don't know what in the nine heavens you're trying to accomplish with all the pinyin, but it's annoying as hell. I assume it's in the name of "maintaining authenticity" but putting them in the place of a word easily expressed in english? What's the point. Really. I don't know what you're trying to do with that but it's only making it harder for the readers. 10. The only kudo I can give you is that the FL is developed really nicely. But simply because one character has good character development doesn't warrant a standing ovation. Yeah, um, basically don't understand the hype. But hey, maybe that's because I'm an actual writer, not a mindless fan. Seriously. If y'all love stories like this, there are 1874839 other books out there that have literally the EXACT same plot. And, oh, those are free.

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chenemi
chenemiLv5

Ok.....your reviews don't have to be so harsh, if you don't like it you drop it! There are alot of people who like this novel.... You know people with high IQ So......take your bad review elsewhere we don't need it

holachica
holachicaLv4

A review's a review man, and not all of them have to be positive. Can't take criticism? Get out. You release your work to the world, then you must prepare to be judged. No need to worry, I've already dropped it!

chenemi:Ok.....your reviews don't have to be so harsh, if you don't like it you drop it! There are alot of people who like this novel.... You know people with high IQ So......take your bad review elsewhere we don't need it
dewdropsonleaf
dewdropsonleafLv4

Dear reviewer... after reading u r review first thing came into my mind "Really good writer with Keen eye". As a reader of the book I respect ur reviews and some points listed I also felt same. I like to read a lot. Many novels I am following in webnovel, I tried many. What I can say it's not that bad. Some things need to take care to like ss , extra paragraphs.... U said ur urself an author, which novel? Wanna to know... I liked ur writing style in the comment

holachica
holachicaLv4

a***. if you click on my profile, you'll find the novel I'm currently writing. "Indigo Emperor".

dewdropsonleaf:Dear reviewer... after reading u r review first thing came into my mind "Really good writer with Keen eye". As a reader of the book I respect ur reviews and some points listed I also felt same. I like to read a lot. Many novels I am following in webnovel, I tried many. What I can say it's not that bad. Some things need to take care to like ss , extra paragraphs.... U said ur urself an author, which novel? Wanna to know... I liked ur writing style in the comment
holachica
holachicaLv4

a w w w*

dewdropsonleaf:Dear reviewer... after reading u r review first thing came into my mind "Really good writer with Keen eye". As a reader of the book I respect ur reviews and some points listed I also felt same. I like to read a lot. Many novels I am following in webnovel, I tried many. What I can say it's not that bad. Some things need to take care to like ss , extra paragraphs.... U said ur urself an author, which novel? Wanna to know... I liked ur writing style in the comment
xeacarons
xeacaronsLv5

Well, u kno there wasnt really dat much of pointless events, i mean, one event is connected to another one and there isnt really dat much of crowd reactions just mere 3-5 lines(idk where did u get 5 paras of useless gossip from) n i found d storyline quite great (well everyone have different tastes)

xeacarons
xeacaronsLv5

U kno its make u look stupid whn u guyz lash out on others reviews just bcuz they didnt like d story(ur likin) n was stating their opinions about d novel....well suckers dat whts a review is for!!! Ppl will share wht they think of d story to others BCUZ ITS A FREAKING REVIEW!! IT CAN BE GOOD OR BAD!! y cant u guyz just accept some criticism its not like dis novel is perfect n nobody cant dislike it!!

chenemi:Ok.....your reviews don't have to be so harsh, if you don't like it you drop it! There are alot of people who like this novel.... You know people with high IQ So......take your bad review elsewhere we don't need it
chenemi
chenemiLv5

.....ok

xeacarons:U kno its make u look stupid whn u guyz lash out on others reviews just bcuz they didnt like d story(ur likin) n was stating their opinions about d novel....well suckers dat whts a review is for!!! Ppl will share wht they think of d story to others BCUZ ITS A FREAKING REVIEW!! IT CAN BE GOOD OR BAD!! y cant u guyz just accept some criticism its not like dis novel is perfect n nobody cant dislike it!!
holachica
holachicaLv4

oh hey, i know this is late but you want to read my novel? I deleted it a while ago BUT i do still have chapters on hard drive (I plan on restarting in the future). an outside eye would be cool

dewdropsonleaf:Dear reviewer... after reading u r review first thing came into my mind "Really good writer with Keen eye". As a reader of the book I respect ur reviews and some points listed I also felt same. I like to read a lot. Many novels I am following in webnovel, I tried many. What I can say it's not that bad. Some things need to take care to like ss , extra paragraphs.... U said ur urself an author, which novel? Wanna to know... I liked ur writing style in the comment
Missy_Marion
Missy_MarionLv10

I think I'm quite interested in the book as well...I want an authentic story with plots and twists that develop meaningfully and not because it happens in "storybook world".

holachica:oh hey, i know this is late but you want to read my novel? I deleted it a while ago BUT i do still have chapters on hard drive (I plan on restarting in the future). an outside eye would be cool
Missy_Marion
Missy_MarionLv10

I'd also like to know those exact storylines that have good content and "oh, are free" 😊

Vhe
VheLv3

😂😂😂 I feel ya

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monotone_gray
monotone_grayLv14

if i'm not wrong..this author has another novel right? not remember..but the novel i read is incomplete? when k see the name..uh uh..this is ss eater..i really hate it when i spend ss..yet the novel when hiatus..

whiteneyz
whiteneyzLv10

Thanks for this review! I, myself trying to complete a book and this one totally is a gold mine for me. I don’t understand y others would feel defensive (maybe because they know its true deep down in their heart?) against your comment but as for me this criticism is great on how to improve one’s artwork. For those who dont understand and had forgotten to use 1% of their so called “high IQ”, criticism doesnt threatened an author or any one who is trying their best to improve their works. Instead, it’ll become their stepping stone in their journey to become really great at what they do. And people don’t just waste their time to write a long review. Some people want improvement. Though, I can see what kind of fans this book had and it totally disinterest me. I am a firm believer that , A book breed its reader’s mind.

holachica
holachicaLv4

yeah the other one is way better, well, at least until the latter chapters

monotone_gray:if i'm not wrong..this author has another novel right? not remember..but the novel i read is incomplete? when k see the name..uh uh..this is ss eater..i really hate it when i spend ss..yet the novel when hiatus..
holachica
holachicaLv4

ah, i can hit you up with some of those

Missy_Marion:I'd also like to know those exact storylines that have good content and "oh, are free" 😊
holachica
holachicaLv4

lol yeah I'm really really harsh on books i don't like, but I don't just troll xD Generally when I get around to writing these long reviews, it's only when I've given a book more than enough chances, meaning, that a lot of stuff that I don't like has piled up. Not just one or two.

whiteneyz:Thanks for this review! I, myself trying to complete a book and this one totally is a gold mine for me. I don’t understand y others would feel defensive (maybe because they know its true deep down in their heart?) against your comment but as for me this criticism is great on how to improve one’s artwork. For those who dont understand and had forgotten to use 1% of their so called “high IQ”, criticism doesnt threatened an author or any one who is trying their best to improve their works. Instead, it’ll become their stepping stone in their journey to become really great at what they do. And people don’t just waste their time to write a long review. Some people want improvement. Though, I can see what kind of fans this book had and it totally disinterest me. I am a firm believer that , A book breed its reader’s mind.
holachica
holachicaLv4

yah :(

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holachica
holachicaLv4

XD

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holachica
holachicaLv4

wait who's book

Missy_Marion:I think I'm quite interested in the book as well...I want an authentic story with plots and twists that develop meaningfully and not because it happens in "storybook world".
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