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GreasyBeer
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2018-10-15 02:13

Shoot for the moon and if you miss you will still be among the stars. Les Brown For this quote to be true, there must be stars first. So let there be stars!

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Chryiss
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Writing: 5 Solid. Nothing to really say. Updates: 5 For some, once a week might be too slow, but maybe I’m biased because I do knce a week too, but I think this frequency is fine. Also, your chapters are longer than mine. Compared to stories that update more frequently with much shorter chapters, I prefer the once a week long length. Story: 4 True to what’s forewarned on the Info page, the story progresses slower than most stories. We don’t see any real action/conflict until after chapter 8. From there on to chapter 20, we finally get through preparation for an upcoming fight. For some, this’ll definitely be a turn off, but for the patient and appreciate of good, detailed writing, this is no issue. Personally, however, I do wish it could speed up by at least 50% as I felt like I was mostly reading dialogue towards the end of the 20 chapters. Character: 4 MC Deus is pretty realistic and isn’t some annoying or egotistical dude. Droh is a nice little sidekick albeit their meeting felt a little too spontaneous to me like hey there, and then let’s move and go fight together. The details on Deus “experiment” status and Droh as a monkey Faun is pretty unique. The other dudes seem like jerks though, so hoping for some new likable characters (or good realistic villains). Additionally, I feel like we can delve into the minds of the main two more, especially Droh. World: 5 Solid as it’s what author said would be and it is. Slow, detailed progression and explanation. There’s even a whole chapter on weapondry. Only thing I might like a little more of is setting ambiance. I’m not quite getting the full sci-fi feel yet. Overall: I think you’re doing a great job. My only concern is that the slow, deliberate will push readers away. So readers, do push on past the 20 chapter mark to really get a feel of the story direction and imperative. Funny enough, this sorta reminds me of my own story. I focus on world building a lot in the beginning, and I have a human and animal sidekick too. XD

JVenior
JVeniorAuthor

Self review as I'm a shameless author who wants to kick-start people reviewing. Embrace the Ether started as more of a fever dream than anything. My desire to create an enormous universe where the very laws that bound it together were different from our own. A universe with different, unique worlds. A story that starts out like something out of a nightmare, instead of the A-typical fantasy world tropes. I start the story off within the world called Midnight, and almost immediately the reader is led to believe that something happened in the past that was a major event, and that there is heavy suppression going forward. Enshil's fall is my first major foreshadowing for this, and is a piece of the puzzle that I'm extremely eager to get further into later on down the line. No one within Midnight is as they appear. Everyone is plotting for their own gains, and everyone desires something different. I despise cookie-cutter villains, so I won't write them. All of my villains have story, background, thoughts, trump cards, and the list goes on. No one is as fragile as they appear, and those who are truly fragile most likely hide it behind a layer of fake masculinity and strength. The illusion of power, now that is something that's always interested me in stories. A Deus Ex Machina, as well, is only a plot-device an author uses when they didn't provide efficient enough foreshadowing. I want to avoid using one myself, to the best of my ability. That's why you'll find plenty of foreshadowing and "Chekhov's Guns" throughout this story. Some are simply fake, others are real. Again, I'm only making this self-review because my audience has been surprisingly quiet in regards to this. Thankfully I have some amazing readers who comment every chapter, and really get into things, like Eee_Sss. Every chapter I post is what is considered "rough", meaning it's been through only one or two quick revisions and is prone to have one or two errors, but I do my best to clean everything as best I can before posting them. Don't expect published quality, but please, hold me to a standard. I appreciate everyone's support and readership. Again, sorry for the self-review, but I really wanted to post this and get the ball rolling.

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