Review Detail of Solw in Starship commander trapped in a fantasy world
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Good start to an interesting idea, and it’s good up to about 3/4 of the story, then it goes downhill unfortunately. A genetically engineered soldier from a technological culture crashes on a magical world. Isekai scenario. He uses his advanced technology to defeat the various magic things, and the magic system gets a pretty good explanation. He then proceeds to hack the magical system, although that isnt developed as much as it could be. So far so good, but then the story progresses and I won’t spoil it for you, but the main problem is that the remaining 1/3 of the book feels rushed and ideas are not developed but instead just happen at a breakneck pace. My biggest issue though is that the ending is a real bummer, which is a logical way to end the story, but again feels rushed and doesnt do the story or character any justice. What a disappointing end to a good start.
Starship commander trapped in a fantasy world
Gamma420
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I'm already writing my next story, just not on here. there's no way I'll come back to webnovel at this point but if you want to read my stuff check out my wattpad, same username
Solw:Shame dude, your story had real promise and I enjoyed the banter between the characters. Yes, the last 1/3 of the story is very different in pace and it’s clear that it’s rushed to finish. Hope your next story goes better and I’d be happy to support it. 👍
Shame dude, your story had real promise and I enjoyed the banter between the characters. Yes, the last 1/3 of the story is very different in pace and it’s clear that it’s rushed to finish. Hope your next story goes better and I’d be happy to support it. 👍
Gamma420:sadly I wasn't allowed to continue working on the story, what has now become the permanent ending was supposed to be a midpoint