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ZyroTheCreator
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2018-12-28 08:08

I'm going to be writing an honest review of this book. For starters, this book isn't remotely perfect. It, of course, has many flaws that could be easily fixed by the author. The grammar throughout the whole book is okay, Chapters 1-10 on the other hand... Let's just say they look like you just past the fifth grade. Anyway, the character development is non-existence in the first volume. The characters are very 2d and have no emotion. Of Course, I know this story is about a serial killer. Yes, serial killers have no emotion, but that doesn't mean you make every character have no deep emotion. Next, we have my favorite. USELESS PEOPLE. Okay, people have talked about this in other reviews and in the comments. Let's all be honest here, Scar is so useless. Why is he even in the novel. How does one become a slave for someone randomly, then Zuhn thinks of him as an equal just because Scar helped him out. Charlotte, Not as useless as Scar but still useless. A random chick with a lot of power in a small town. Doesn't kill Zuhn, but later for SOME REASON gets scared of him. Legit no reason for her to become scared of him. If she is from some secret organization why is she scared of some random youth. Don't even get me started with the ****ty organization that she was in. No point in bringing her into it. Later they fight and they die, bs if you ask me. Thinking of Hencewood. What the **** is the point of the kid. Like, wtf? He's so useless he's worse than Scar. It's hard to be more useless than SCAR. Like, let's talk about this. This random rich kid hears that Zuhn killed/hurt his men. Tries to track him down, his men get killed. Now he random thinks Zuhn is some powerful guy that can be bought into his army. Like how does that work? Alright, let's stop with all of that. How about Windwood sect. Honestly, I don't understand what happened there. Like, why the **** did he become his disciple then just betray. Just because the guy had a slave doesn't mean he should betray. So stupid. Demon Wars, Like why the **** did you think that was a good idea? Like who thinks, "mmmm... Demons!" Fucking no one. The Demon war thingy was just filler chapters. The fighting scenes were dog****. No action just Zuhn stabbing them in the neck. Actually thinking about fighting scenes they were all dog****. Volume 2 Now, I'm not going to completely talk **** on the author. (I totally am.) Volume 2 is WAYYYYY better. Think of volume 1 as wet dog**** and think of Volume 2 as Dried Dog****. (Picking up wet dog**** is the worst, Dry on the other hand isn't that bad.) Volume 2 was a huge upgrade to the book. The Chapters actually made fucking sense. They were made by someone with autism. The characters were tons better! 3d ish, still kinda 2d but better than the first volume. Chapters are a lot longer and more descriptive. The ancient trial went on for fucking years. Waste of time tbh. Anywho the book is getting better and better as the author listens to his readers. Real Ratings of this book. Writing Quality Volume 1 - 2.5 Stars (Dog****) Volume 2 - 4.0 Stars (Not Dog****) Stability Of Updates Volume 1 - 5 Stars (Uploaded everyone day) Volume 2 - 2.5 Stars (Doesn't Update worth ****) Story Development Volume 1 - 1 Star (There wasn't any) Volume 2 - 3.5 Stars (At least there was some) Character Design Volume 1 - 1 Star (What Character Design?) Volume 2 - 3 Stars (There is some) World Background Volume 1 - 3 Stars (Eh, It's okay) Volume 2 - 4.5 Stars (Better than Volume 1) Coming to a total rating of Volume 1 - 2.4ish Volume 2 - 3.2ish Now the reason I'm giving my stars much higher on the site. Mostly become this book needs more people to read it. And well SOMEONE review bombed this novel. So, ima just going to make it a 5 Star review. If you are a long time reader you will understand. Make me the TOP review!

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