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yanayuki
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2019-05-10 08:10

Interesting characters! This is s refreshing take of the female lead being predatory and endearing at the same time. It's fast paced and the author writes clear dialogues. I'm enjoying the excitement in every chapter.

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Blackgrace
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At first I thought the story was alright. Nothing spectacular. Nothing bad. Just your average enjoyable story. Pretty classic plot. Perhaps I noticed problems that others seem to skip over because I binge-read it. I think the first thing that started bothering me was that the story is mostly carried through conversation. This isn't pleasant to read. It doesn't allow us much insight to surroundings, time, background or thoughts of characters. Not to mention, surely your characters do something else, besides talking, which is relevant to the story. The second problem is the pace. It's really fast, but also really not. I didn't realize this problem at first because of how much had happend by this point (mainly conversations) so I assumed that in the story quite a bit of time had passed as well. That's when a character mentioned that only four days passed since the beginning of the story. At that point I was somewhere around chapter 80. It' pretty unforgivable to only have four days passing in 80 chapters. Especially because it would have worked perfectly well to have done the same thing in more time. It certainly felt like more time. In fact once I knew it was only about four days things started looking a bit unrealistic. This guy who had absolutely zero interest in his wife before has come to love her in four days. Love, not in love but love. That's a pretty quick chance especially for a guy that's supposed to have no clue about love because of his loveless childhood. These were definitely the main problems but another problem I had was that the author likes to dangle things, only to do absolutely nothing with it. There is the father-in-law who supposedly treats the main well. No mention of where he is but I'm guessing he's missing because I can't imagine why else the only person who visited her in the hospital besides her best friend isn't interested in seeing her when she's finally out of coma. (Also unrelated to this problem section but what kind of hospital allows patients to leave on the day they came out of a coma) Similarly we're told that she's actually from a powerful family but that her in-laws don't know this. Only for nothing to happen with said family. We don't even get in contact with them. This is only made worse by the main saying several times throughout the story that she's going to contact her mother. She never does. Please. Act. On. Your. Words. Don't dangle something like that in front of me for 80 chapters only to do nothing with it. Don't go mentioning something about a handsome fiancé when you can't even follow up on the family. Step by step. By actually taking those steps and not just talking about them. Alright. Now that I've mentioned everything that vexed me but also can be be improved. This isn't meant to be a hate review it's meant to be constructive. So let me congratulate you on the fact that all the friendly characters have a clear voice and personality. Definitely something to be proud about. The evil guys can use some more work because right now they're all just typical white lotuses.

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