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Larsn
LarsnLv26yr
2019-01-29 02:11

Well...I don't know what to say other than this story is a grammatical nightmare. It's just...sigh. The premise is beautiful and I guess you can ignore the errors if you like it enough but...well. You really should work on your pronouns in particular. Just to clarify, for a woman is used /she/ and for a male /he/. Always. No exchange between the two can occour. Not only that, you also fill the chapters with unneeded info, throwing up facts left and right, making it a boring read. Is the reason why I only gave you 3 stars for world background. It's not that you did not develop it, it's just that...you didn't really fit it very well in the story. You should try to integrate your info more with the flow of the story, revealing smaller bits in more points. There is no need to dump everything on the readers at once, it only stops the flow and few people will read those added parts anyway (like i did) which is a pity. Aside from those points it's a beautiful story, I liked it. You probably should just think more about editing your chapters rather than postin them quicker, really. Anyway, I hope I didn't offend you with my comments and that instead they could be of some help to improve your writing style.

I transmigrated as the Female Leader, but I want to marry the villain!

Take_the_Moon
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Take_the_Moon
Take_the_MoonAuthor

Hello, here is the author: Title: I reincarnated as the female leader, but I want to marry the villain. Number of chapters per week: 5 + 2 extras. Number of Chapters for the novel: 100 (I always establish this goal, you can pass.) Genre: Xianxia, Female Main Character, Strong Female Character, Action, Comedy, Adventure, Cold and Distant Male Leader, and Romance. NOTE: There will be mature content and R18, but will be warned in each chapter. I hope you enjoy, as I always love to write a new world, forgive me the grammatical errors and even the mistakes regarding the Xianxia world, I accept criticism and suggestions, if they will come that I messed up or changed the information regarding the Xianxia world can comment or send message, I promise to correct. Kisses

6yr

Naruzaki
NaruzakiLv5

Author when are you coming back?? Honestly i wish you'd update at least once a month is okay......author we miss you plz do come back and i love the characters and the story development. Hope to hear from you soon dear Author😄😄

6yr
QinLian17
QinLian17Lv5

Just reading this synopsis made it thrilling and exciting. What more if I read the first chapter? Hihihi, i have high expectations Author.. Pls update daily... Make it more entertaining.. 😄😄👯👯

6yr
Naria
NariaLv10

OK I dropped this after chapter 50. I should dropped this earlier. Lot of unnecessary information, messy timeline, and plot. The author few times mixed up "she" and "he", which made me question few things. "Now XY character have a husband or a wife?? " I was skipping chapters because of the lot of unnecessary information while the characters didn't do anything and the story was not moving at all. The author jumping between past and present, confusing sometimes the readers. No hate, but this story just not my cup of tea although I read lot of transmigration and reincarnation novels, this is just a no for me.

6yr
Erotas
ErotasLv5

The story and characters are great! BUT the grammar is a big OOF!! You need to get an editor or hire a new one because there are a ton of errors that ruin the flow of the story. Work hard and don't give up!

6yr
cRazyReaderNovels
cRazyReaderNovelsLv5

Reveal spoiler

6yr
TigerAkemi1
TigerAkemi1Lv14

I like reading this... the only problem I have is the spelling errors and the wrong pronouns used to describe the genders at times, he became she and etc. But I like where this story is going! Please update soon! 😁😁😁

6yr
Tizon
TizonLv14

A very good read, this has a very good and well thought world background and plot. Even though there are some grammatical mistakes author seems to be improving. Currently loving this work hope it continues stably. Thanks for the author for your hard work. 😁👍

6yr
joethenoob
joethenoobLv15

Having fun reading this. A few mistakes in grammar and quite a few situations where he/she have been switched by mistake. A bit too much info dump in every other chapter though. Exposing this much information needs to be done more sparingly. Love the characters but that system is making my head hurt. Story progression is hurting a bit from the constant irrational sidekick.

6yr
Lonely_traveler
Lonely_travelerLv12

it was an okay story till chapter 11 when i got to chapter 11 i couldn't even tell what the **** was going on anymore and thats pretty bad for a novel

6yr
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