It's good to stop here now. I thought something was off with the 1st arc then comes a long the 2nd arc. At first, I didn' know why at times the story irritates me until this chapter. I don't know about the others but I find each arc paced unevenly on some parts then it felt like character development isn't flowing correctly. Some abrupt changes especially in the FL. I can't express it clearly but it just felt uncomfortable? or like something is missing? or flow of story is not right? Anyway, that's just me.
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I think so too that the 1st arc was fast phased. It felt it was of a narrative essay (in my own opinion). On the 2nd arc, the author puts more effort on the writing. Which I think is a good development so far (regarding his/her writing style). I think that most writers here in Webnovel are still amatuers, but that doesn't mean they are all terrible. Most writers here needs an EDITOR, which sadly either few or amateurs too. Technicaly it needs improvement, as all novels in Webnovel. In creative idea, this has potential. Maybe give the author some slack? NOTE: "A WRITER is typically charged with the creative task of putting words on a blank page, whether for the purpose of informing, persuading or entertaining. The work of EDITOR may be slightly more analytical, as they must review, manage and guide a particular work or series of works to successful publication." -information searched from the internet
Yeah, that's it! It needs editing. Though, I know the author is still green, I just don't feel like reading it right now the way it is. So, I'll consider re-reading it again if it does get properly edited.
Mehmehehe:I think so too that the 1st arc was fast phased. It felt it was of a narrative essay (in my own opinion). On the 2nd arc, the author puts more effort on the writing. Which I think is a good development so far (regarding his/her writing style). I think that most writers here in Webnovel are still amatuers, but that doesn't mean they are all terrible. Most writers here needs an EDITOR, which sadly either few or amateurs too. Technicaly it needs improvement, as all novels in Webnovel. In creative idea, this has potential. Maybe give the author some slack? NOTE: "A WRITER is typically charged with the creative task of putting words on a blank page, whether for the purpose of informing, persuading or entertaining. The work of EDITOR may be slightly more analytical, as they must review, manage and guide a particular work or series of works to successful publication." -information searched from the internet
I agree. The story was indeed fast paced. And her unexplainable memory loss thing? I dunno if it's on purpose or not, but it feels slightly irritating because the MC keeps on courting death. If feels like the MC is rushing to die or sth and the thoughts put towards the romantic plot is...I dunno...it just feels wrong somewhere...I cannot fully describe it. But maybe it because it's the beginning? But the story had almost come to 6th arc?... right? I dunno...I just feel irritated whenever I see the fl disregard feelings and keeps courting death!!
yep, hard to pin point for me too, but reading further just makes you feel irritated for some reason. so, i had to stop.
IdleReader111:I agree. The story was indeed fast paced. And her unexplainable memory loss thing? I dunno if it's on purpose or not, but it feels slightly irritating because the MC keeps on courting death. If feels like the MC is rushing to die or sth and the thoughts put towards the romantic plot is...I dunno...it just feels wrong somewhere...I cannot fully describe it. But maybe it because it's the beginning? But the story had almost come to 6th arc?... right? I dunno...I just feel irritated whenever I see the fl disregard feelings and keeps courting death!!
I don't want to stop. The story's good. It's just that the MC is always courting death! The story could go to a perfectly happy ending, but the MC courts death and the story becomes a bad ending!
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