If you like system administrator stories you should give this one a try. I like the fact she didn't die just kidnapped * not spoilers first chaoter*. What I will probably like less is that she always leaves right away after the mission which is sad but also has it's good points since you see the original owner actually getting her dreams the writer should also try to use this and write how the original host does after she takes back over..... this way we get answer to the questions which the princess doesn't want to make since it should be left to the original host so that's a tip I have.... keep it up see slot of potential here...
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Hello, first off, thanks a lot for reading my novel. :) Second, I really liked your idea, so I'll consider it for the second arc. Thank you so much for the advice.
Ofcourse no problem but always keep in mind stay true to yourself.... we came here in the first place to read your story so don't be to swayed by comments if you think it doesn't fit. Saw way to many good stories ruined that way so always consider every comment carefully if it fits your style.... losing yourself for a few more readers not worth it..... I was just curious since you left slot like the original should decide so I just wondered..... ____ spoilers ______ like wad she mad bout being abandoned, how they explained it's if she rlly stayed friends with those ppl and if she was as pure in that friendship or if those friends noticed the change..... and how is it that she keeps her skills fully??? Is it that because she rmbrs and the practices and breaks through the bottlenecks fast since it's musclrmemory or is it automatically uploaded by rmbering..... those kind of things cooled be flehed out in a fawaii chapter like what you did now but a bit more elaborate since some of those are relevant questions and could add extra to the story.... like that you mentioned that he did notice that he was gone did those friends notice to..... but your sorry us great and like I said only fit comments in it ya thought it through.... always keep through to yourself... Love your story any who. Btw rlly like it that you have a clear chaoter division I like to save up arcs cuz I hate cliffhangers so rlly thank you for that clear division!!!!!
