So far it's been a well paced piece with good and solid characters. Also i noticed you don't use much commas, as some paragraphs feels crammed. I know your word count is a lot each chapter so instead of adding "breathers" sentences which would eases up the whole flow of your chapter a right use of comma would do a lot, specially when you start with those lengthy scientific explanation.
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