Could you tell me how to improve on the story then?

He/she got you there

Ikr

Glad to see that I have an expert who's a master of everything you just commented on. Hope to see you start your own story soon. I'll enjoy reading it since you know what pitfalls to avoid😁

Did it really take you this long to reply? Just speaks to the level of incompetence you put into your story because at this point I don't even remember what your story was supposed to be about. But honestly "laws" are a man-made construct used to describe and comprehend the things that happen in the natural world around us, can you explain what this "law of fishercraft" is and what natural phenomenon does it encompass? It doesn't take a writer to know which stories are good and which ones are bad, if it did then it wouldn't matter if one story had been read by millions of people because in such a setting a reader's opinions would be considered useless and not important at all in developing the writing skills that cater, literally, to the entertainment of those who are reading it, and not all writing is in the form of stories. I used to write but not stories, I used to write poems for my creative writing class. SO maybe next time instead of lashing out with passive-aggressive comments about my writing experience when it comes to stories you should instead focus on improving yourself because the fact that you responded meant you needed to and that ends up making me look like I am right when you so obviously wanted me to be wrong. Piece of advice my opinion will never directly interfere with your life unless it is in a social sense which will only serve to bring you up or down in said social standing, so maybe think "Huh maybe he was right." and then re-read what you wrote yourself and compare it with what was commented instead of taking it personally and decide as an author, who when putting something on the internet for all to see and whose goal is to entertain, whether or not the person(audience) that you tried to influence with your writing was right or not in what they said about your story.

Yes it took me this long to reply since you don't know my circumstances. Yes, it doesn't take a writer to tell which stories are good and which are bad. But it takes a critic to tell the author what they did wrong and his they can improve. When has taking a long time to reply to a comment show how correct the comment is or the effort one puts into their story. Who says a law has to describe a natural phenomenon? Quote the person for me. Do you even read xianxia fics or any fantasy novels? And you dare to judge me based on what? That the law in my story does not describe a 'natural phenomenon'. If you are saying laws are meant to describe and comprehend the natural world around us then what about the laws passed by the government. Do they also describe the natural world around us? By the way after a useful comment, I always go back and review what I did wrong in order to better myself and improve my story for everyone reading it. After all, a writer who does not improve is a writer who does not care about his craft. So you 'used' to be a poet for your creative writing class and through that you have writing experience, that's great but is that all the experience you have? Writing poems for your class? What about writing stories, do you have any experience with that? I agree with you, not all writing is on the form of stories but I still stand by my point. Is poetry the only form of writing experience you have Piece of advice, your comment does not mean anything to me since I did not benefit from it. I'm going to forget about you and your comment as soon as I get off this site. I have better things to do after all. Please space out your comment if you're typing long paragraphs. Makes it easier on everyone who wants to read it.

Lol, I even said my opinion had no direct effect on you but you brought it up again anyways as if it meant something that you are not able to benefit from it or that you'll forget it once you leave this site, you realize how off point your retaliation comment is right? If you were going to come back at me on the topic of laws you should have done your research instead of linking together laws that are man-made to rule over society and the types that a universe consists of, here's the definition of the type of law I was describing when talking about your story which you then directly related to those which are man governed, "A description of a direct link between cause and effect of a phenomenon deduced from experiments and/or observation.". Please don't go even relating the 2 different defined laws if you want to consider yourself an English writer when a law is formed by your government when decided by its people's moral code, "The binding rules of conduct meant to enforce justice and prescribe duty or obligation, and derived largely from custom or formal enactment by a ruler or legislature. These laws carry with them the power and authority of the enactor, and associated penalties for failure or refusal to obey. Law derives its legitimacy ultimately from universally accepted principles such as the essential justness of the rules, or the sovereign power of a parliament to enact them." Please tell me where was your description of the causes and effects of the law that is "Fishercraft"??? Also, how does it directly link to the natural world or even the artificial world of man? I have only read up to the point in which you have written this terrible story so don't go quoting a chapter 50 chapters after the one in which I commented. Do you know what a Creative Writing Course is? Probably, considering how creative your story was based on my first comment. Which is why I wrote poems, because they are short and simple, I never wrote a full story in that class because the limit of time makes it impossible to write a large story. I have written many tiny stories which I no longer have due to Google having a large number of security measures making it impossible to access old emails where my stories are in my Google Drive. Oh, by the way, is this spaced out enough for your limited brain capacity? I know that large gaps are an important part of your writing experience which is why the logic is so flawed not only in your story but in your comments and responses. If so glad I can help if not well I hope you already left this site like you said you would otherwise you are just showing the world how easy it is to make you not go and do the plentiful amount of better things you could be doing right now and I don't think you'd want to go back on your words right? **: I dare judge you based on the fact that I am human, have read stories specifically in the xianxia and fantasy genres, and that all people in this or any world are allowed their own opinion. Also if you are going to tell someone to space out their writing into smaller paragraphs you should at least indent your own.