Review Detail of TinyOrc in Leading system

Writing quality criticism: " This is wrong way to space quotation marks . " "This is the right way to space quotation marks." Character design criticism: Readers will appreciate it if you describe how the main character looks, what he wants to do overall, and what his favorite things are. Favorite things as in hobbies, quirks, etc. In other words detail! Give me something to help imagine the scene. Word background criticism: What year is it? How does that time period differ? Has peoples fashion sense changed? Describe the environment in the planet. Anything else about the human culture different? Is KFC still on the downturn in the United States?!! Is the United States now called The Colnel Confederacy? Thanks