Review Detail of Ace_Ara in Adventures With a Reincarnated Bush
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I truly love it. If there is word to define what I feel, I will say it's about freshness. This story reminds me about a RTW fanfiction about being reincarnated as rock and wielding magic, except this one actually have original framework so it has more materials to develop. The only concern that I have is the sentence structure, it might be some residual dialect of the author that makes me have some difficulties to get the nuance being implied. I also found some sentences/phrases that I believe can be shortened/rephrased and still retains its intent. The need of the editor is quite high for this work, nonetheless the story itself is amazing, it's a really great take on the way of plant's life. Do you know that, after reading this story, I did self reflection about our treatment over plant and animal... I will add this, you might add a chapter about cultivation jargon especially the power level, to clear some ideas
Adventures With a Reincarnated Bush
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Haha, I believe it's still count as dialect issue, it seems to me that your native language is English, apparently speaking and writing does have different rules in communicating the intent delivered, I can volunteered as editor although my skill is not that great either and I can only do them at weekends though and I do admit that the comma's placing is sometimes quite confusing for the uninitiated.
Untolddead:Thanks for the review. I wish I could afford an editor. It's nice of you to say that the poor sentences are due to dialect but, I fear that's not the case. As for cultivation I agree with you and am already working on a chapter to go over that.