Review Detail of Lawlyeth in Adventures With a Reincarnated Bush
Review detail
This novel is written and looks like a lot of other novels on royalroadls (dungeon kinds and re:smthing ) that are quickly dropped (yeah) The story is a bit too childish ( the thief , the rambling of the MCs and the villagers) and the characters are not well enough introduced (as of today I don't give a f*ck to any of them except the thief) The uploading pace is a bit low to nowadays novels It's stll good and would like to continue to read it as long as possible until you decide to drop it. 97/100 IGN
Adventures With a Reincarnated Bush
Untolddead
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Thanks for giving me a good review even though you have critiques. Sorry that my characters ramble and are childish :(. I have though about going back and adding more descriptions to the story. I'm definitely more of a dialogue writer. The childishness comes a lot from the fact that I was planning on writing a short comedy originally. However as people started reading and I came up with a few ideas for a more long term story it became a bit more serious. But I've been afraid that if I go too serious and straight I might disappoint people who like the comedy. So I've been trying to mix it together. I always feel bad about the upload rate. I can't say sorry enough. Time just seems to slip by... I don't really have any good excuses. I'm glad you enjoy it to some extent! I have no plans of dropping this. I will keep writing as long as people are still reading and enjoying. or until the end.
That right there is the kind of attitude that will make this book grow. I'm glad you're open to these kinds of good criticism. Don't be afraid to make the story a little bit serious at times because too much comedy, and less event building can make the plot feel rushed at times. Good comedy can make a situation turn from boring into exciting among other things Well, I'll have to read your story to give better advice so expect me in the reviews sometime soon.
Untolddead:Thanks for giving me a good review even though you have critiques. Sorry that my characters ramble and are childish :(. I have though about going back and adding more descriptions to the story. I'm definitely more of a dialogue writer. The childishness comes a lot from the fact that I was planning on writing a short comedy originally. However as people started reading and I came up with a few ideas for a more long term story it became a bit more serious. But I've been afraid that if I go too serious and straight I might disappoint people who like the comedy. So I've been trying to mix it together. I always feel bad about the upload rate. I can't say sorry enough. Time just seems to slip by... I don't really have any good excuses. I'm glad you enjoy it to some extent! I have no plans of dropping this. I will keep writing as long as people are still reading and enjoying. or until the end.
MilordInk:That right there is the kind of attitude that will make this book grow. I'm glad you're open to these kinds of good criticism. Don't be afraid to make the story a little bit serious at times because too much comedy, and less event building can make the plot feel rushed at times. Good comedy can make a situation turn from boring into exciting among other things Well, I'll have to read your story to give better advice so expect me in the reviews sometime soon.
