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TwentyFifteen
TwentyFifteenLv116yr
2018-09-12 08:54

At first i didn't expect much from this work, but the more i read the more i'm being pulled into the story. You're really get a good naruto fanfic with so much potential here. Fromthe writing quality, it was actually can be categorized as well writen. Though, there are some part that maybe need to be fixed in my opinion. I observed that the author writing style consist more of description paragraphs than dialouge. For many maybe, it was not a problem at all. But i must say that it may make some peope get easily bored when reading. That being said, maybe increasing the dialouge between characther will be a good idea since it will make the story feel more alive. Beside it, overall it was really a nice work with interesting character, plot, and story idea. Thanks and keep the good work. :)

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This story is about a prodigy from the Uchiha clan who was born before the second ninja war. Unfortunately it lacks in character development and is mainly a poorly thought out wishfulfillment novel. Writing quality: The author does not seem to know what paragraphs are. This combined with long sentences makes for a poor reading experience. The grammar and spelling are not that great either but passable at least. Story development: Shortened academy arc followed by the second ninja war. Standard stuff for naruto fanfictions. After the academy thee MC seems to just go rambo on everything he meets, no matter the matchups. Higher level opponent? GO IN FOR THE KILL! Heavily outnumbered? GO IN FOR THE KILLS! Anyone with less plot armor would be a corpse already, not to mention some victories make no sense with 2vs1000 fights happening and somehow being won solely because he's the MC. On top of that he somehow gets everyone's respect cause he's awesome and keeps winning fights he has no business winning. Wish fulfillment without actual good ideas or planning from the MC, he just jumps into everything and wins by pure plot armor. Stability of updates: Chapters are frequent. Characters: The MC is a prodigy who has the goal of becoming stronger. The character itself is incredibly 2D since the MC only cares for jumping into battles and gets angry when someone he knows is hurt and does not seem to have other traits. The side characters are cardboard cutouts as well, they are mentioned by name and ninja rank but do not seem to do anything besides telling the MC to care for his friends and fight enemies. There's no humour, interesting quotes or actually developed personalities to be found. World Background: Absolutely terrible. The entire ninja village structure of the second SHINOBI war has been changed to modern army structures, somehow the villages have at least 10x more shinobi than in canon. Just to enable the MC to go on huge killing sprees everything ninja has been destroyed for easy targets. It has changed a great world background into something that makes no sense instead of adding a unique twist. Either limit changes to a functional background or make sure the characters can use the changes to add an interesting spin to the story. In this case all we get is a loss of strategy and mindgames in exchange for unbelievable fights with tons of plot armor.

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