I could not get through the first chapter. This fanfiction is so sloppy and fast paced, with brief and unrealistic interactions. It's like something I would have read in elementary school to satisfy a shattered ego and a need for self insertion as the main character. The speech follows formatting that makes one think the entire chapter was a brief idea the author had in the shower and wrote down while in. Causing the ink to run and thus giving birth to all those typos and lack of cohesive flow. I would be able to look past this as English is the authors second language, would the author have created some type of exposition to explain why the mc was able to just go with it like it was normal. This alone did not give me hope for it. I had a peak at the formatting of the 48th chapter to see if it improved. And I am glad to say it did not, as that would mean I might have given the story a chance. To any one reading, should you want a bleach system in a another world, try god of soul system, it is in the one piece world a few years before the main story. Should you want any system that just is amazing, try either ultimate scheming system or the strongest system, both of which are on webnovel. Personally if you want to give it a shot, giving valiant life, which is an encyclopedia that give the owner godlike ability of a single profession per page, is a hilarious read. It being one of my new top reads, I'd strongly recommend you try it instead of wasting time on this dumpster fire.
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While it’s true that this novel is fast pace and could improve more, the overall idea and story is not that bad. And before you judge B** . I’d like to see you write one better
B**? Are you using a slur so obscure that it is known in your mind only? I have written one such fan fiction. It was when I was still in elementary school. And I feel only shame for it, as this person will one day feel as well. But they will get better, thus the reason they can feel shame. What about you? Are you still in the phase of life where you can run outside naked, play with your dick and think, "why isn't everyone else doing this, it's fun"? I bet you enjoy this fan fiction because like your name, your a voyeuristic cuck who gets off on NTR. And I don't disagree its an ok not good premise, because that's why I took a chance to read it genius, but I have read it, and have found problems. Good day.
InnerVoice:While it’s true that this novel is fast pace and could improve more, the overall idea and story is not that bad. And before you judge B** . I’d like to see you write one better
Yo yo, chill the f** out, how am I suppose to know you write fanfic before. Just saying if you can’t do any better, then don’t judge , as most people do. And FYI b** my name just mean I like to read and watch shows. Don’t twist facts
SirSnuffy:B**? Are you using a slur so obscure that it is known in your mind only? I have written one such fan fiction. It was when I was still in elementary school. And I feel only shame for it, as this person will one day feel as well. But they will get better, thus the reason they can feel shame. What about you? Are you still in the phase of life where you can run outside naked, play with your dick and think, "why isn't everyone else doing this, it's fun"? I bet you enjoy this fan fiction because like your name, your a voyeuristic cuck who gets off on NTR. And I don't disagree its an ok not good premise, because that's why I took a chance to read it genius, but I have read it, and have found problems. Good day.
What the **** does f** mean? The fact that you understand that you can't know if I write, should lead you to thinking you don't understand my current standard. Then again, you like NTR. Guess anything besides such would be considered subpar to you.
InnerVoice:Yo yo, chill the f** out, how am I suppose to know you write fanfic before. Just saying if you can’t do any better, then don’t judge , as most people do. And FYI b** my name just mean I like to read and watch shows. Don’t twist facts
Sigh... just trying to clear the bad first impression between you and I but whatever, think what you want
SirSnuffy:What the **** does f** mean? The fact that you understand that you can't know if I write, should lead you to thinking you don't understand my current standard. Then again, you like NTR. Guess anything besides such would be considered subpar to you.
It's all good baby, I still love you 😉😍. One day you'll mature, read novels you once thought boring, and read hentai novels you find amazing, and grow as a lover of all that is novel. And you'll look back on this, and forget all about me, but you know what you don't forget, your first experience reading NTR, and that's my legacy, I'll live on as a footnote in your shame. 😙. With love, Sir Snuffy
InnerVoice:Sigh... just trying to clear the bad first impression between you and I but whatever, think what you want
I’m getting mic feeling here. Its like you’re giving me good advice and mocking me at the same time. It’s like you said, every person’s perspective on things change as one age. You may like something that you once dislike in your younger years or vice versa but why you gotta throw this hentai **** into this biz.
SirSnuffy:It's all good baby, I still love you 😉😍. One day you'll mature, read novels you once thought boring, and read hentai novels you find amazing, and grow as a lover of all that is novel. And you'll look back on this, and forget all about me, but you know what you don't forget, your first experience reading NTR, and that's my legacy, I'll live on as a footnote in your shame. 😙. With love, Sir Snuffy
Read My Novel then.... ^^ Pleasssee.....
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Jesus Man Chill.... You Need to eat some candy! xD
I'll check it out, just don't be dropping it if I get addicted to it. 😘
Chenglei:Jesus Man Chill.... You Need to eat some candy! xD
Hehehe Thx Sir Snuffy! 😉
SirSnuffy:I'll check it out, just don't be dropping it if I get addicted to it. 😘
Nice novel recommendation...I already gone through all of it...by that I even finished the machine translated one, is there more recommendations?
Off th e top of my head, fishing the myriad Heavens is a good read. Crazy detective is an ok one, trying to figure out the riddles that describe the quest will not be advised. I can turn into a fish isn't a masterpiece b it it'll pass the time. Both the gourmet novels on this app are advised to read, fairly funny, easygoing for th e most part, and you'll get hungry. I can't remember the name but the main character is fang zhou and I can't express all that it is, b it it was an amazing read, but webnovel has slowed its releases to almost nothing, but it has a stockpile of 333 chapters, so it might start back up while you catch up.
Oniichan_Thickskin:Nice novel recommendation...I already gone through all of it...by that I even finished the machine translated one, is there more recommendations?
Also I've started a will eternal, it has got chuckles out of me so far.
Oniichan_Thickskin:Nice novel recommendation...I already gone through all of it...by that I even finished the machine translated one, is there more recommendations?
I READ IT TOO!!!!! Fishing the myriad Heavens!!!! I also stockpiled, the release schedule is really crappy...that's all I could say, it's funny to think that there's at least already 1100+ chapters already been google translated...quality is better than machine translated.
SirSnuffy:Off th e top of my head, fishing the myriad Heavens is a good read. Crazy detective is an ok one, trying to figure out the riddles that describe the quest will not be advised. I can turn into a fish isn't a masterpiece b it it'll pass the time. Both the gourmet novels on this app are advised to read, fairly funny, easygoing for th e most part, and you'll get hungry. I can't remember the name but the main character is fang zhou and I can't express all that it is, b it it was an amazing read, but webnovel has slowed its releases to almost nothing, but it has a stockpile of 333 chapters, so it might start back up while you catch up.
Exactly, also, I really really recommend a will eternal now, I've read up to 110 chapters and its a shameless comedy goldmine. I am waiting till a few more chapters before I have enough to binge for an hour of fishing myriad heavens.
Oniichan_Thickskin:I READ IT TOO!!!!! Fishing the myriad Heavens!!!! I also stockpiled, the release schedule is really crappy...that's all I could say, it's funny to think that there's at least already 1100+ chapters already been google translated...quality is better than machine translated.
If you want to read fishing the myriad heaven- go to comrade mao, might not be perfect English but it’s definitely better than most machine translated, just the chapter arrangement is quite mess up though...
SirSnuffy:Exactly, also, I really really recommend a will eternal now, I've read up to 110 chapters and its a shameless comedy goldmine. I am waiting till a few more chapters before I have enough to binge for an hour of fishing myriad heavens.
I had a CD still have high hopes for lnmtl, using humans to correct some uncommon phrases in the machine translating Within specific novels
Oniichan_Thickskin:If you want to read fishing the myriad heaven- go to comrade mao, might not be perfect English but it’s definitely better than most machine translated, just the chapter arrangement is quite mess up though...
the chance of that happening is close to non-existent, at most they're only changed one or two words every few weeks- by the time they fixed it you're already been spoiled.
SirSnuffy:I had a CD still have high hopes for lnmtl, using humans to correct some uncommon phrases in the machine translating Within specific novels
