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xWinterLv106yr
2019-02-06 04:30

As a Master's (Top 500) League of Legends player in Season 8, I would think I have an edge over other readers in this certain type of genre, so here are my two cents on the novel. The novel itself is great, I thoroughly enjoyed each of the chapters. Good writing along with good pacing makes the story an interesting read. It has decent enough characters and game backstory to make it enjoyable. The story does seem unrealistic to a certain sense. I think a good MOBA story boils down to how much the author itself understands the genre of MOBA's. Although he does explain the basic nitty-gritty of game mechanics, he fails to mention any important or groundbreaking that players with more skill would notice, and that will have an effect on how far the novel can progress linearly. It's fine since these guys are middle schoolers and are still learning about the game, but if he wants to bring this novel from a lighthearted read to an actual quality MOBA novel, it's going to take a lot of work. Overall, still a good read. There's no other MOBA novel to compare this to, so I guess it is a staple. There are things that could be improved, but the things the author does writes, he does correctly.

Classmancers - A MOBA Esport Story

DarkClaymore
4.4
626 Chs

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DarkClaymore
DarkClaymoreAuthor

I see it's a tradition for authors to post a review on their novels, so why not. This is my third web novel series. Some of you may have comes across "How Do You QA Test a Tsundere Android?!" or "God Vessel Online", most likely on RoyalRoads. Can't say any of my fics ever achieved much popularity, though. This is a very experimental story, since nobody else seem to be interested in writing proper Esport stories. That's why I went "I'll do it myself then!" It's pretty challenging to pull this off without any reference to go by, but I'm doing what I can. Any critique, both positive and negative, is more than welcome. I need as much feedback as possible to figure out how to best write this unusual novel. No way I'll be able to figure everything out on my own. RELEASE SCHEDULE: A 3k~5k words chapter a week. GAME WIKI: https://classmancers.wikia.com/ HOMEPAGE: https://darkclaymore.wordpress.com/classmancers/

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Get_rekt
Get_rektLv4

Its interesting, for some moba player will think this novel refreshing, and for non moba player they will know why moba is very interesting. Just try 5 chp or more before judge it

6yr
smilingdepression
smilingdepressionLv4

I legit just like this book lol amazing story and something new compared to the usual system bs.therefore this story is something new and refreshing for me .

6yr
rg1400
rg1400Lv6

its a brilliant story may take a few more chapters to attract many more readers but will surely be popular before long. MOBA esports are still new to many people. So, its acceptable that this story takes its time to succeed. its rich in content, excitement and overall totally worth its penny.

6yr
AoGuang
AoGuangLv4

Truly a great story with a lot of untapped potential. The story, so far, has shown that the main character, Yuel, is strong and not invincible, which is a redeeming quality as it allows alot of different and unique situations. The characters are all different in there own rights. Overall its a great story and has many ways that author can take it

6yr
Doohie
DoohieLv12

First off this is really well written. Writing about MOBA's can get tricky because you risk a massive info dump, but I think the author has done a great job of it while keeping it interesting. I like the character types, but I feel they are too rigid in their archetype, I would have liked a little more gray and less black/white. Still that is fine and the archetype for the mc is particularly interesting. My real problem with the characters is their age vs how they behave/talk, they definitely behave/talk above their age. I hope the author continues doing such a good job and we get to see a really good coming of age story.

6yr
Shadowmile
ShadowmileLv14

Reveal spoiler

5yr
Daoist_Rei
Daoist_ReiLv5

I never review novel before, so i dont know what should i say as well, all i can say is, this novel got a really nice story, nice development, nice character, and many relateable thing if you play some sort of MOBA, author itself have a very consistent update schedule, the quality of story itself keep improving instead of becoming worse like most of series, i cant really think about any cons of this series except for i cant read new chapter everyday haha, Quality > Quantity though.

6yr
daoist_om
daoist_omLv4

The novel has an almost professional feel, even though it is not my type of novel, I will definitely check it out for future updates, the characters have a motivation and more importantly, they feel real. The mc might come off as a bit of douche in the initial chapters but that's ok, and world building is very good. and I feel like there is a conspiracy behind the pushing of this game to the mainstream schools if you like gaming novels then this is a must for you to check it out.

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