Item: Classmancers - A MOBA Esport Story
Rating: 4.2
Author: Doohie

DoohieLv126yr

2018-09-04 02:58

First off this is really well written. Writing about MOBA's can get tricky because you risk a massive info dump, but I think the author has done a great job of it while keeping it interesting. I like the character types, but I feel they are too rigid in their archetype, I would have liked a little more gray and less black/white. Still that is fine and the archetype for the mc is particularly interesting. My real problem with the characters is their age vs how they behave/talk, they definitely behave/talk above their age. I hope the author continues doing such a good job and we get to see a really good coming of age story.

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