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2018-08-28 00:33

This novel begins slow, but has a steady pace with a well thought out (and planned) story. A lot of stories have the problem that the main character gets to strong to fast. This is not one one them and the potential of the story is enourmes. In my opinion this is one of the most underrated stories on this site.

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This is probably one of the harder reviews I've written. To give away the ending, Spirit Immortal comes in the the low B/high C range for me, but I'm pretty brutal with my reviews so that's actually a pretty high score for me. The difficulty comes in that the way I would score the later chapters are vastly different from how I would rate the early chapters. If I was to break it down by volumes the first two volumes score in the D range, volumes three and four are B's while volumes five and six both rate a solid A. Spirit Immortal is honestly a fairly sweeping tale set with a cultivation backdrop. I phrase it like that specifically because even though the MC is always working towards a higher cultivation, it isn't the cultivation as his goal it is instead a tool he uses to measure himself by. The main flaw is that Spirit Immortal is a Character Driven novel where the main character doesn't start with a clear goal. He goes as far to describe himself as a leaf carried by whichever way the water flows. This isn't bad but it's much harder to write in the early chapters then if you were writing a Story Driven novel, where the plot moves along because of an external factor, i.e. an enemy army is coming or you have to defeat the demon king. The comments on the early chapters highlight this indirectly, where people attack the author for useless details and pointless arcs. Reading through the whole story, these comments aren't true as you encounter a similar amount of details and varied arcs in other novels, but it's how the readers perceive the story since they are reading it 'in the moment'. What it actually is is a problem in pacing and *******. Since the motivation comes from the character but the character is still discovering the world around them it's hard to generate the appropriate feeling of ******* in order to carry the story. The way you mitigate this is with foreshadowing and switching character viewpoints in order to portray what's happening external to the MC that will move the story forward and create a sense of crisis. The ******st way for me to phrase is it that it's ok if your main character is aimless and doesn't seem to know where he's going, but you can't let your story seem that way. However this problem disappears to a large degree by the beginning of volume three, the momentum which the story has built starts to sweep up the reader. However this also means you have to read a hundred chapters in to get to juicy parts of the story, which makes it a hard novel for me to recommend. There are a lot of absolutely brilliant characters in this story, but you have to take your time to get to know them and the world they build around themselves. Since the author has stated that he isn't interested in participating in the premium program on Webnovel I'm actually going against the advice I've given to every other author here: Don't go back and rewrite your story, it *always* turns out *bad*. In this case I would actually encourage the author to hire either a Developmental Editor or a Story Coach to help revise the story and then publish it electronically himself. Alternatively just treat it as your 'first million words' and keep going.

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