Review Detail of Khalua21 in Rise of The Undead Legion
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I absolutely love this book. Bean reading it for almost a year now and I hope to continue reading it for years to come. The characters are well thought ot and developed with thither own personalities. No cookie- cutter character troupes send basic every guy is evil and every girl is beautiful/ in live with the MC. Plot armor is there of course but is not so thick as not ti be ever overcome. The MC is smart, tactful, honest, devious, lucky, but not all powerful. You can honestly feel the roots the MC head to dig himself out from to climb his way towards the top. The In- game aspect of the story is exciting to the point of addiction, and the RL-aspect of the game is a nice and welcome addition to the story that it's both well thought out and necessary. If I could recommend this story directly to a hundred peaple I would ragland it to a thousand. If I could give the story ten stars I would want to give it twenty. If you want a great story, with twist and turns, detailed but easy to follow plot, and manageable info- dumps that don't rant on and on. This is your kind if book.
Rise of The Undead Legion
Biako
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StingLikeAMountain:How have you read it for a year? its only 350 chapters atm. itd only last a few days
What about lone arrow? Did something happen? I dont know if I should drop after when they meet in chapter 30 or so, the way MC told his secrets to her just after meeting and basically became retarded is unbearable
Khalua21:No as in I've been reading it since its first 80 or so chapters.
StingLikeAMountain:How have you read it for a year? its only 350 chapters atm. itd only last a few days
wasn't thinking when i wrote that part, but Lone is basically the best waifu currently, try to hang in there and ul see why
Space_Fox:What about lone arrow? Did something happen? I dont know if I should drop after when they meet in chapter 30 or so, the way MC told his secrets to her just after meeting and basically became retarded is unbearable
Chapter 1 is quality stuff. Chapter 2 is a train wreck. Mainly because I actually care about the small details. This review is about chapter 2, well, technically chapter 2 and 3. According to the author’s note, there was an issue while uploading chapters, so chapter 2 and 4 was posted. As a solution, the author decided to edit chapter 2, and pasted chapter 3 onto the bottom with the reason “so it wouldn’t affect the later chapters.” If you could edit chapters, couldn’t you replace chapter 4 with chapter 3? Anyways, chapter 2 is a mess. Pointless chapter. Could be summed up in a few paragraphs. Multiple paragraphs of characters repeating what each other says. Multiple massive 5-6 paragraph long info dumps which kills the immersion in the story. Info is meant to be revealed over time, not forced down our throats all at once. Character dialogue unrealistic. Friend: “You can earn money playing this game.” MC: “What? I can earn money playing a game?” Friend: “Yes, you can earn money!” MC: “Yay! I can earn money!” Friend: “One gold coin for one real life dollar.” MC: “I’m a normal person, so I’ll waste 3 sentences repeating that bit of info because I can break the 4th wall and I know that the readers are idiots. So I need to repeat everything my best pal says just so the readers can remember the info.” Instead of feeling like a normal conversation between best friends, it feels completely fake. Like an act put on just to give the audience another info dump. Yes, he did research to maximize money earning, and that’s why he spent multiple paragraphs talking about kingdoms and guilds. Yet he couldn’t even give a reason for why he chose human over the other races during character creation. He wants to be a tank. A bloody tank. Also, he wants to be a solo player. He’s broke, and playing the game to exchange game money for real money. How does he expect to farm monsters efficiently as a solo player who’s a tank that does poor dps? What was the point of doing research if he’s not going to use his brain? Stop switching between kingdom, empire, and empire wannabe when referring to the Eastern Region. Inconsistency is annoying. For that Korean guild that’s in the top 3, why does the guild leader have a Chinese username? Why does the MC feel the need to robotically state his next set of actions out loud? “I’ve played games my entire childhood and that’s why I’m gonna say, ‘AS A NEWBIE I NEED EQUIPMENT! IN WHICH CASE, I NEED TO DO THE STARTER QUEST TO GET EQUIPMENT!! WHICH IS WHY I’M GOING TO DO THE STARTER QUEST NOW!!’ Oh, the reason why I’m saying all of that? That’s because I’m a normal person who feels the need to explain all my actions to my imaginary audience of idiots who don’t even know that in games, you get equipment by doing the tutorial/starter quest.” Why does the MC not have a plan after doing all that research, and randomly changes his actions and statements on a whim? “Hey, I see him! That’s the tutorial NPC! Charge!! Halfway there now, just 5 more steps... I’m so close.... wait, stop. I have a map. Yes, I see my map icon. It’s right there. Not there, yes, there. The floating icons at the edge of my vision. Let’s open my map. Lemme give you another 3 paragraphs on the town’s layout, features, and why there’s so few players around. Now back to the story. Oh, did I just say that I must do the tutorial in order to get equipment? Nope! Actually, I’m heading off to the trading grounds! I’ll train myself and get my starter equipment there! Thank god for maps, now I know places and can change my nonexistent plan that I came up with after hours of researching!” “I can exercise to increase my stats! Lemme give you another few paragraphs of info. Info dump finished.... OR SO YOU THOUGHT! Let’s recap. Lift weights for strength. Jog for stamina. Here’s more info on how physical actions cost stamina. Now, a paragraph of calculating how
Biako:wasn't thinking when i wrote that part, but Lone is basically the best waifu currently, try to hang in there and ul see why
Jumin:Hey so I can guess by the title what’s the MC class/power/ Magic is but to be 10000000000% sure can you spoil for me??
SageDrunkKitty:Chapter 1 is quality stuff. Chapter 2 is a train wreck. Mainly because I actually care about the small details. This review is about chapter 2, well, technically chapter 2 and 3. According to the author’s note, there was an issue while uploading chapters, so chapter 2 and 4 was posted. As a solution, the author decided to edit chapter 2, and pasted chapter 3 onto the bottom with the reason “so it wouldn’t affect the later chapters.” If you could edit chapters, couldn’t you replace chapter 4 with chapter 3? Anyways, chapter 2 is a mess. Pointless chapter. Could be summed up in a few paragraphs. Multiple paragraphs of characters repeating what each other says. Multiple massive 5-6 paragraph long info dumps which kills the immersion in the story. Info is meant to be revealed over time, not forced down our throats all at once. Character dialogue unrealistic. Friend: “You can earn money playing this game.” MC: “What? I can earn money playing a game?” Friend: “Yes, you can earn money!” MC: “Yay! I can earn money!” Friend: “One gold coin for one real life dollar.” MC: “I’m a normal person, so I’ll waste 3 sentences repeating that bit of info because I can break the 4th wall and I know that the readers are idiots. So I need to repeat everything my best pal says just so the readers can remember the info.” Instead of feeling like a normal conversation between best friends, it feels completely fake. Like an act put on just to give the audience another info dump. Yes, he did research to maximize money earning, and that’s why he spent multiple paragraphs talking about kingdoms and guilds. Yet he couldn’t even give a reason for why he chose human over the other races during character creation. He wants to be a tank. A bloody tank. Also, he wants to be a solo player. He’s broke, and playing the game to exchange game money for real money. How does he expect to farm monsters efficiently as a solo player who’s a tank that does poor dps? What was the point of doing research if he’s not going to use his brain? Stop switching between kingdom, empire, and empire wannabe when referring to the Eastern Region. Inconsistency is annoying. For that Korean guild that’s in the top 3, why does the guild leader have a Chinese username? Why does the MC feel the need to robotically state his next set of actions out loud? “I’ve played games my entire childhood and that’s why I’m gonna say, ‘AS A NEWBIE I NEED EQUIPMENT! IN WHICH CASE, I NEED TO DO THE STARTER QUEST TO GET EQUIPMENT!! WHICH IS WHY I’M GOING TO DO THE STARTER QUEST NOW!!’ Oh, the reason why I’m saying all of that? That’s because I’m a normal person who feels the need to explain all my actions to my imaginary audience of idiots who don’t even know that in games, you get equipment by doing the tutorial/starter quest.” Why does the MC not have a plan after doing all that research, and randomly changes his actions and statements on a whim? “Hey, I see him! That’s the tutorial NPC! Charge!! Halfway there now, just 5 more steps... I’m so close.... wait, stop. I have a map. Yes, I see my map icon. It’s right there. Not there, yes, there. The floating icons at the edge of my vision. Let’s open my map. Lemme give you another 3 paragraphs on the town’s layout, features, and why there’s so few players around. Now back to the story. Oh, did I just say that I must do the tutorial in order to get equipment? Nope! Actually, I’m heading off to the trading grounds! I’ll train myself and get my starter equipment there! Thank god for maps, now I know places and can change my nonexistent plan that I came up with after hours of researching!” “I can exercise to increase my stats! Lemme give you another few paragraphs of info. Info dump finished.... OR SO YOU THOUGHT! Let’s recap. Lift weights for strength. Jog for stamina. Here’s more info on how physical actions cost stamina. Now, a paragraph of calculating how
My God, Its irritating to deal with your godd*mn spam. When I'm trying to read an actual conversation between two different people. Its obvious you haven't taken ANYTHING from our earlier argument since you are using that same argument you used before about the deleted reviews. You still have no evidence of a deletion. BRING SOMETHING NEW TO THE CONVERSATION. For example of something we can debate over. I think that this books first chapters can be improved. Mostly spelling but also in some story elements. I think you mentioned before how much you dislike the early chapters. Can you elaborate? Then we can have a discussion.
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