Review Detail of Anguisdrassil in A Rattling Monster [Completed] (Editing in Progress)
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This is actually good. I enjoyed it quite a lot. The humor is kinda good but also excessive. Now, here comes an honest and real review. Writing Quality: 2 stars The grammar in this is really bad. I had a hard time reading the first three chapters as I got confused over what the characaters were talking about. Stop refering to the MC as "our hero". Use his name, that's why you gave him one, right? Also try to desribe the characters that you introduce. It doesn't have to be a perfect description, but a little bit so that I know at least how he looks like. This doesn't just apply to the main character, the other minor and side characters could also use a little desciption. Explain to your readers how the MC knows the thing he knows. Like in the second chapter. How does the MC know that there is a hierarchy among the gods while he just met the first and only Goddess in his life. Sure, people are quite perceptive but not that much. Keep it in moderations. Make the paragraphs shorther and if you did all this the Story development: 4 stars The potential and the future for the story is looking really good. The potential of the story is what brought me here and is what keeps me waiting for more. Character Design: 2 - 2.5 stars This is a little hard to judge since with the bad grammar the real image of the characaters isn't described good enough. If the grammar is fixed then I would definitly give them a 4 star. World background: 5 stars The world aspect of this novel is yet another point that captivated me. In the first chapter where the author geniunly gave a reason as to why Heroes and Demon Kings came to exist at the same time, I knew that I would like this story. So all in all, the only real thing that is bad about this novel is the bad grammar. But don't let my review prevent you from reading this 'cause I still recommend this even with the 3.2 stars that I gave.
A Rattling Monster [Completed] (Editing in Progress)
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Well ty for your review, it is constructive. And about the our hero it is explained later why the "narrator" call him like that. And yes, except the *** and the job and sometimes the age, most of the time, the descriptions are lacking. A good example is the first group of adventurers, who are just described by their names and their professions. But about the Writing quality, besides the errors, one of the main point is the use of (-) for the discussion, am i right? Unfortunately, in my language, this is how dialogue between two people are written. So i won't and can't change how i perceive such a thing. But that will provoke a huge hate from some readers, or at the minimum, some complains and incomprehension.
The most frustrating with that style of writing, is that the dialogue isnt signified to end. You just randomly end it without anyone niticing, and the writing of the dialogue itself is sometimes just not coherent. No person talks like that, and no god would get flustered by some puny mortal and act like a little girl. Its just overall a bad writing quality that turns me off even tho i want to really read your novel.