Review Detail of KoFu_ in A Rattling Monster [Completed] (Editing in Progress)
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3 Stars. (IDK what score Qidian will give, sometimes I put 3 stars and the system post my review as 4 stars.) You have an amazing idea! Congratulations! You choose a mob monster and turned it evil. You chose the easiest path yet people love it. But your writing really sucks, you write very annoyingly. How? You write. like this. On each. paragraph they are at. least more. than 10 dots. you know. the comas. exist. right? (-1 Star) I prefer a whole sentence without a dot so I can read at my own pace instead of you cutting my reading with a dot. If you are going to use it, use it with care. Also, the God that he's following said that the "God Mode" that is like a security camera above the MC can only be used sporadically, yet he uses it all the time. Also, he's the least curious character of all times, he has a god as a follower and didn't even ask for his birth, the origin of the universe, the meaning of life....(-0,5 Star) The inconsistency of writing, you said that the MC only had 10 mana after the ritual and yet, somehow he can still throw acid spells like spitting on the ground. (-0,5 star) TL;DR: Excellent idea, writing suck so much that I'm considering dropping it.
A Rattling Monster [Completed] (Editing in Progress)
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Great review, not hateful at all. Thank you for reviewing at least. So yes, mutliple small sentences. You prefer some long sentences, i get it, but say that i always do short is not very accurate. As for the God Mod, yes, that i forget it and over used it, even if i kinda hinted that after the harvest of fairy crystal it was enough for Oslo to recover. You could have said in a comment. And i would have progressively patched or give a reasonable excuse.And that would make my novel improve. But it's better to just say it in a review. And ask for his birth, meaning of universe? WHO CARES? Seriously. You are in a fantasy world, what the hell, are you concerned by the Big Bang. No, you just want to know usefull information. Getting fed up with stuff you have no interest like the number of stars in the sky or something like that. That point i really don't get it. He knows how,when and why he was born in this world. That's enough. Maybe more about the world but Oslo doesn't know it, he is an external god. Not a single inconsistency. Not a single one. I said, that he regen MP, everyone regen MP.Saying that he doesn't regen MP form the moment he leaves the palace to the southern wall is stupidity. While i didn't precisely say the time of travel, from the East Wall to the palace, and i apologize for that, you can imagine it takes some time. And that he still has enough for just 3 spells. So in the end, you can probably rate it 3.5 stars, i agree with the writing quality but more because of my grammatical errors and the character that i made a little plain. Not the inconsistency, i never messed up that.