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Animetine
AnimetineLv146yr
2018-06-28 05:06

This author desperately needs a editor. The grammar here is horrendous. Bordering on illegible. Otherwise it has a good premise, story might need some fine tuning, like an introduction to the character maybe? or some developement to help you understand where he came from and where he is going BEFORE his death. So you understand him and his time before the travel earlier on in the story. Overall, i suggest getting someone to fix the writing for the author. But keep up the work, its possible to make it better, looking forward to it.

Travel Back in Time With Super intelligence System

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Solarious
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Trust me dude there is faaaar worse. One story i found is grammer cancer 😱 thus story is pretty good imo

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IPreferLonerMc
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Grammar is awful. Just awful. There’s also some unrealistic scenes like bidding for an item from an arcade machine, but I guess getting a system is unrealistic as well so that’s ignorable.🤦🏻‍♂️. There’s some face slapping too and some of the characters have no depth. For example, the bullies at school that harass and then a stubborn girl who won’t “bow” down but will later fall in love with the MC. The teacher which is also his first crush is ignored for nearly 20 chapters. I don’t know why, but I just don’t like this much. If the author fixed the grammar and story then it’d be 4 stars.

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Dmatetoh
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Interesting work. Hope for more releases and updates for Power stones.. I rate 4 as it is still new. 😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😏😏😏😏😏😋😋😋

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Yggdrasil_
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This book is amazing, keep going!  Can't stop reading. Can't wait to see more. Do you have any social media that I can follow so I can know when you gonna update?

3yr
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