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UbeLv46yr
2018-10-07 14:32

Writing Quality: 3 *** - This is due to the author not giving a proper development for every thing that happens within the story. Things just happen out of nowhere in things such as the MC's love interest. The good thing is there are not too many mistakes in the author's spelling or grammar. The issue only lies within the author's delivery. Stability of Updates: 5 ***** -At the time of writing, I have not yet arrived at the latest chapter. But a short scroll through the table of contents allows me to conclude that the author is very diligent in releasing chapters daily. The author has achieved a minimum of 1 chapter per day and a maximum of 5 chapters per day on this web novel. Although this is great, I would suggest that the author should only try maintain it at 1 or 2 chapter per day so that more time can be put into improving the quality and to avoid health issues. Story Development: 3 *** - It is an interesting novel, the only issue is that the development is not consistent and is too rushed. Most of the problems surrounding the development of the story can be attributed to the character design, mainly the MC and those close to him. Character Design: 2 ** CONTAINS SPOILER FOR 3 DIFFERENT CHAPTERS - This is the area that bugs me the most with this novel. Characters do not match their 'mold'. For example, the father is an esteemed general and yet he allows his son, who he knows to be a person who does not focus on cultivation and only knows how to harasses women, to lead an army. Sure, the father saw his son fight others in one of the chapters, but someone of his ranking should have the brains to doubt his son and not be confident in him blindly unless he doesn't care about the lives of his men. Better yet, why would an esteemed general let his son, who he does not know the full capabilities of, to go ahead and assassinate the opposing army's leader? From what he understands of his son, he should be doubting the mental health of his son for proposing such a plan or be worried for the success of the mission or safety of his son. Anyway, what I would like to say is that each of the characters should have a proper foundation that can justify their decisions and actions. Whatever they do, should make sense from what was said in previous chapters or descriptions. The chapter that annoyed me the most was when the MC got together with his love interest. Whatever the MC told the love interest did not match with what happened in previous chapters. I started to doubt whether the MC was just coaxing her or it was just simply bad development. The author has a nice naming sense though. Just need to put more effort in building stable foundations for the characters and make them stay in character unless they are forced by the circumstances. World Background: 3 *** -Barely any information is given about the world but there is no issue with that. Your typical cultivation world, just with a different naming for the cultivation levels. All in all, this is a decent novel to read to pass time when you're bored. I do not suggest this to people who are picky about quality of the story itself. The author is improving and I think that his/her next story would be an interesting read if he/she comes up with a good plot. Read this novel if you wish to witness the authors' rise. To the author: Good job and keep it up. If you find my review bad or mean in anyway, I am not sorry. :) If writing is your passion, I hope it helps. Though I think there are more I want to say(both positive and negative), it's already late and I can't remember them.

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UbeLv4

It's annoying how the site only shows the total score of the review. I wish they would just show it when you hover the mouse on it or just show it on the side.

TheAdventurerAuthor

Ok fam

Ube:It's annoying how the site only shows the total score of the review. I wish they would just show it when you hover the mouse on it or just show it on the side.
Kentaro_Ken_6052Lv3

nice review and it's very constructive... i hope author-san's novel will get better and more interesting...

NotOnTheAppLv3

Indeed

Ube:It's annoying how the site only shows the total score of the review. I wish they would just show it when you hover the mouse on it or just show it on the side.
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