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D3vilL0rdM4ch1naAuthor6yr
2018-07-18 18:49

So, I've been writing this for a good few weeks now and I've come to realise one thing. I personally think that I've come a long way since I first started planning the story a year ago, I've made many edits to the original and extended on my character development so far, even on little characters like Erika. Even so, I feel like I could still do much better. I've realised that I'm not going to improve unless I get feedback from the ones who are reading right now. Please be honest with your feedback, otherwise I won't be able to improve my writing at all. All I really ask is that you enjoy the story, and help me improve my writing skills.

Devil's Knight: Love After Death

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Wow, I'm only just beginning, but Keitas character truly captures the hardships of many adolescents today. Its deep! Compelling! And a b9ok you just won't want to put down!

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Dude love it.. But it's too fast.Slow down a little your arguements and moral quandaries last all of a paragraph stop it stretch it out give them real character not shallow shadows of real emotion 2

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Very good progression with the story with a stable amount of updates. As someone who is very critical about what they read i would have to say that this story is very well structured and would recommend to others.

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This story is one of the better online stories I've read and the writer puts so much into developing characters and plot. Characters really show up in the story and integrate quite quickly into the plot. Writing at times can be a little bit underdeveloped but otherwise, this is a great story.

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