Review Detail of Zeist2 in MMORPG: The Tales of Souls

Your story Backgound is interesting but it was not really writen much after the intro and i fand this the best part of your story. Writing quality is bad, you can read the story but to many gramar fault but the greteatst BS is your characters in the story. To many bad cliches. lack of consistency and logic, when i have read the story i was thinking are all persons in the game idiots or 5 year old children?