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Scarlettbunny
ScarlettbunnyLv52yrScarlettbunny

So I am caught up. I don't particularly read BL, I have my days where I will find that I need something different in my life every once in a while usually once a month but still I am actually happy I kept reading through the chapters. It had a bit of a rocky start in the beginning. The grammar was bad but quickly improved later one. Like amazingly improved the only complaint is the repetition of the word "doll" particularly in the same sentence/ dialogue. They way that Dom's personality is honestly the best in the words, possessive and protective, I would expect his to same more like your my property, you belong to only me, gorgeous just only watch me and I will keep you safe, or No harm is to come to this body! If you get ever a scratch on what belongs to me I will kill you. But I got to say the intimate scenes top notch, like you are the one doing all the tantalizing haughty....drool ... cough... experiencing the scenes. Absolutely wonderful. I love apocalyptic novels mainly for the struggle one will need to put come out on top. It's still in the semi early stages. Love that they have been attacked but I feel like they are moving through the world a little too easily. Could use some more suspense but again it's still early and I know we need to learn about what is going on. It's NYC there has got to be some mutated rats climbing along the side of the wall peering their ugly beady eyes into windows. Keep up the good work! Permanently in my library!

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The Black Out

Froschmo

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Froschmo
FroschmoAuthorFroschmo

thanks for the review!! I will try to reduce the repeated pet names, geez it is my weakness, since english isnt my mother tongue, I find myself lack of vocabulary sometimes, and repeating same words again. I try to reduce them, even has the google translates as my prisoner lol. Yeah, for the apocalypse type, it was rather light. I have been thinking to increase the suspense, but after consideration, deciding to save them for later and explain the world change first. I will try best haha, thanks for the feedback!

Scarlettbunny
ScarlettbunnyLv5Scarlettbunny

For English not beinging your first language it is well done. I'm excited to see what happens next🥰

Froschmo:thanks for the review!! I will try to reduce the repeated pet names, geez it is my weakness, since english isnt my mother tongue, I find myself lack of vocabulary sometimes, and repeating same words again. I try to reduce them, even has the google translates as my prisoner lol. Yeah, for the apocalypse type, it was rather light. I have been thinking to increase the suspense, but after consideration, deciding to save them for later and explain the world change first. I will try best haha, thanks for the feedback!
YueMiking
YueMikingLv4YueMiking

Pet names... Doll, Princess, Pet, My Sweet, Sugar, etc. You could probably find some pet names on google, lol.

Froschmo:thanks for the review!! I will try to reduce the repeated pet names, geez it is my weakness, since english isnt my mother tongue, I find myself lack of vocabulary sometimes, and repeating same words again. I try to reduce them, even has the google translates as my prisoner lol. Yeah, for the apocalypse type, it was rather light. I have been thinking to increase the suspense, but after consideration, deciding to save them for later and explain the world change first. I will try best haha, thanks for the feedback!