didn't want to cuss at that point but it just my way of saying Jesus Christ.
I'm sorry. It's very slow but it does get pieces together
Alright, so oread both pre-change and then change and my mind was blown. The first version was somewhat slow and not very story like but then the author had to bring their "A" game and just captivate the reader from start to finish. Though the transition of speech to action is a little sloppy, if the author could find a way to mix the POVs together to make it flow smother it would be amazing however it still makes a good read. The characters are spectacular for first introductions and the world is still developing. Give it chance 😄😄😄
I think there may be a typo here. Or I could be completely wrong
could have been more story like then factual... I only say this with experience. I know when I tell my kids a story and don't make it super exaggerated and factual they know I'm just trying to get through it and they reprimand me for it. like my favourite bedtime story, once upon a time the end. Real crowd pleaser.😋