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Ultravioletx
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Graphic harem cultivation novel that falls into the pitfalls that are typical of harems. Worldbuilding is, well, bad. "Having concubines is normal in this world, but he didn't have any as Mu Lan chased every single one away." CHP 20 When I first read that in the webnovel, it raised the questions; Why is it normal in this world to have concubines? How come, if it is so normal, there is a distinct lack so far of concubines, and sons and/or daughters of concubines? Having read much further, the people with concubines that are introduced are vilians to get killed while having an extremely high status in the world. Hardly common and blatantly manipulative. This, and various other exposition is used more as justification for something while not being implemented, and at times get contradicted. Furthermore, exposition given at times are irrelevant to the story as a whole. The lack of implementing worldbuilding hurts other elements of the story. For example, showing the protagonists interacting with families with concubines (chief among them should have been his own family he reincarnated into) for a period of time could have helped show why he switches his viewpoint into think harems are okay. Instead, well, he gets a new partner roughly 1 week after being seperated from the girl he was willing and indeed die for, in 2 weeks has a harem despite previously living in a society where monogamy was the norm and considered the right thing. The protagonist is bland and lacks agency, a byproduct of trying to throw as many women at him as possible while trying to absolve him of any blame of having multiple partners, as well as having him be a nice guy by fulfilling the goals and desires of the what will become harem members as the plot. The harem members have little depth. As per the norm in these types of stories, they are extremely beautiful, have high cultivation talent in their home area and/or high statuses, and their reason for wanting to join his harem is.....because he is nice. Seriouly, nice guys are so rare in this world that females that can essentially take their pick of partners while ensuring the man doesn't bring in concubines are willing to share a guy for that reason. It's to the point where any female that spends even the slightest amount of time with him wants him. The harem members interactions with him are more or less the same after joining the fold, with one exception. What it should have done is limit the amount of key harem members, give the key members vastly differing personalities, then put them in situations where these differences are highlighted so they at least seem different from each other. The plot is virtually nonexistent. It gives the protagonist goals with deadlines with very serious consequences. Despite this, the story focuses heavily on the protagonist getting harem members and having intercourse with them, to the point where at times it becomes questionable if he is even working towards goal or even cares. It goes without saying, the plot progresses at a snails pace. The grammer is okay. A few mistakes here and there, but overall readable with little issues. Overall, a story should be composed of different elements that have some sort of overall balance. This one doesn't. Not something worth reading unless you're really into harems with graphic intercourse scenes because there's not much else to it.

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Spirit Cultivation

Piokilek

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MissCosmos
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You're so awesome! you speak facts

Piokilek
PiokilekAuthorPiokilek

Dude, This is the first novel I have ever written after being sucker at writing. I naturally wont be rewriting the whole novel as thats just a waste of time. I know that its not an excuse but yeah, I sucked when I started writing this novel, having no idea what am I doing. I never even though I would earn fron this and make it my job. Cheers

Piokilek
PiokilekAuthorPiokilek

And I know all those facts you said. I just cant change it anymore. I would rather write a second or third novel which will be better. Thanks for taking time to point that out but many already did. Wont change the fact that I can't focus on rewrite when my 3rd book is full force in planning and editing. It would take me half year to rewrite the whole novel but for what? Most of my readers wont go back and read it again. *shrug*

Ultravioletx
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I wrote the review because I disagreed with some of the top reviews that popped up, with the goal in mind that anyone who chose to read my thoughts on this webnovel are clear about why I think a certain way. Did I expect you to read this then change everything? No, it never crossed my mind. At best, I would hope that any writers or future writers that read this and are interested in writing harems consider my analysis before or while writing. Since your already aware of these thoughts and possibly consider them valid, great. I wish you the best in your future writing endeavours.

Piokilek:And I know all those facts you said. I just cant change it anymore. I would rather write a second or third novel which will be better. Thanks for taking time to point that out but many already did. Wont change the fact that I can't focus on rewrite when my 3rd book is full force in planning and editing. It would take me half year to rewrite the whole novel but for what? Most of my readers wont go back and read it again. *shrug*
QCh3ng_Realmlord
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The guy who saw his comment was touched. How could he leave him like that. With a sincere smile on he's face he said "Thank you" and he gave him a 'pat' on his head. ;;;;))))))

QCh3ng_Realmlord
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his*

QCh3ng_Realmlord:The guy who saw his comment was touched. How could he leave him like that. With a sincere smile on he's face he said "Thank you" and he gave him a 'pat' on his head. ;;;;))))))
Ultravioletx
UltravioletxLv4Ultravioletx

Can you clarify what you mean by this?

QCh3ng_Realmlord:The guy who saw his comment was touched. How could he leave him like that. With a sincere smile on he's face he said "Thank you" and he gave him a 'pat' on his head. ;;;;))))))
Ultravioletx
UltravioletxLv4Ultravioletx

Can you clarify what you mean by this?

QCh3ng_Realmlord:The guy who saw his comment was touched. How could he leave him like that. With a sincere smile on he's face he said "Thank you" and he gave him a 'pat' on his head. ;;;;))))))
QCh3ng_Realmlord
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meant to be a joke cause of all the 'pats in the head' in the novel and praise your comment . đŸ‘đŸ»

Ultravioletx:Can you clarify what you mean by this?
Ultravioletx
UltravioletxLv4Ultravioletx

Ahh, okay. It's been awhile since I've read this lol, I can't remember much of the content from the story anymore. Thanks for the praise nonetheless.

QCh3ng_Realmlord:meant to be a joke cause of all the 'pats in the head' in the novel and praise your comment . đŸ‘đŸ»
No_One_00
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Thanks. I read this novel but is full of cliches bit still has a high rating so I thought maybe I was just being impatient so I continued. But, the more I read, more cliches came so I again checked the reviews to see if it's normal. There's so many praises here and there but I thought otherwise and when I saw this comment I've decided...... Dropped

Ultravioletx
UltravioletxLv4Ultravioletx

I'm glad the review helped. Personally, I only take the reviews seriously if they go into depth. If, for example, the rewiewer thinks that the characters are well written, why specifically? Hobbies, character arcs, dynamics with the other characters etc. If bad, why is it bad. Is it because the characters have nothing defining them outside their role, that they are ignoring their supposed traits and history to do what the plot wants them to do, etc. Detailed enough to make up my own mind. Sadly, you won't find much in-depth reviews on this app. I would recommend you set a limit on 20 chapters to read to give a webnovel an opportunity, if you feel you MUST give a webnovel a chance. Beyond that, if it hasn't interested you it probably never will.

No_One_00:Thanks. I read this novel but is full of cliches bit still has a high rating so I thought maybe I was just being impatient so I continued. But, the more I read, more cliches came so I again checked the reviews to see if it's normal. There's so many praises here and there but I thought otherwise and when I saw this comment I've decided...... Dropped