The concept is ultimately interesting, sadly the author fails to evolve it. One of the bad points is the scripted style, that is the worst thing you can do if you want someone to really feel immersed in your narrative, using, MC: Hello. Just feels soulless, You remove all personality by stopping narrating your story to give more attention to mere dialogue. Another thing that I don't like is the development of the story, you can't develop the story by having the characters explain everything, for example: in chapter 5 a secondary character talks to who is supposed to be the MC's cousin "Ah, you talk about your cousin who is such a person, who achieved certain things and who did it at this moment", which I understand is a resource for the reader to know what happened in the plot, for me that is a problem, the story has to offer a development, not a character in a single dialogue. I hope the author is able to change these aspects so that, in my opinion, the story improves. Good luck.

Great start author pleaaaaseee dont drop it, TAKE MY STONES[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=update][img=update][img=update]

Here's 5 starts just for writing a fanfic on f.r.i.e.n.d.s. Please don't drop. Your other fanfics are also great.

Lemme know if it continues.. was very good but for now I’ll have to take it off my library

i dont know if its me alone , but the conversation between characters seems soooo mechanical , as if it was written by AI or something. the stability of updates is meh , charecter design is pretty good so far. overall i reccomend the author to improve his writting to make to more smooth for reader.

best fanficcccccccc........., pls don't drop

A melhor série primeira vez que vejo um a novel dele e adorei continui não deixe a de lado como muitos criadores de conteúdo obrigado pelo livro.

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Need more sir or madam I love are book and quality